HEARTBREAK

HEARTBREAK

A Poem by Star

Why does love sometimes sit on our chest and lacerate the heart?

The salt dripping in her eyes

The bleach burning fires

Her eyes are a dried desert

A hot summer sun

Blinded from the scars that have laced them

The moon is the lighted path at night

Over a funeral piece

In the dark she hides all the words that hang on the hinges

of her heart...soul...mind...mouth...

In the night she hides behind a charcoaled face with her

bottle of whiskey....

Her mind is a clouded sky

She drips into the earth her weeping spirit

 

 


© 2013 Star



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I relate to your words, Star. Having felt each and every one of them before even I read them.

Posted 9 Months Ago


The words are very beautiful but they paint in a unique way tragedy and heartbreak and the pain and suffering that results. Very well crafted poem. I enjoyed reading this.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It is a beautiful poem. Great Imagery

Posted 2 Years Ago


Lovelyy and heartfelt...
Keep up the good work :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Each word perfectly describes the romance... I admire your skills.

Posted 3 Years Ago


I love how melodic this felt. The dark whimsy in her heartbreak is very archaic. For as long as man shall exist...heartbreak will always be inevitable.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Star

3 Years Ago

Aw thank you muse and I believe that too..about men..lol
"The moon is the lighted path at night

Over a funeral piece

In the dark she hides all the words that hang on the hinges

of her heart...soul...mind...mouth...

In the night she hides behind a charcoaled face "

A very sad but lovely poem. I like the questions you have asked too...Bravo


Posted 4 Years Ago


Star

4 Years Ago

Thanks for looking Sami and your input
Sami Khalil

4 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)
Why does love sometimes sit on our chest? So that we can become better at pushing ourselves up with the strength we'll need to survive.
Why does it lacerate the heart? So we can learn to sew and heal others.
(Hey, it's the middle of the night...I had some time to kill! lol)

The rest of this was mesmerizing, especially loved:::: "In the dark she hides all the words that hang on the hinges of her heart...soul...mind...mouth..." .... "She drips into the earth her weeping spirit"

Thanks for the share

Posted 4 Years Ago


Star

4 Years Ago

That s awesome you taking parts of my poem and writing your own words...I like it...thanks for looki.. read more
It is not love that is doing it, it is the person who misused loved.

A fine little piece of writing.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Star

4 Years Ago

Hey thanks cowboy

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Star

Yakima, WA



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