Alive but not living.

Alive but not living.

A Poem by Gee
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Living after the death of a life-long love

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In armchair old his body slumped
beside the unlit fire,
in a rested state, serenaded by
that evenings crickets choir.

Old and weary, bathed and clean
fresh clothes against his skin,
a hearty meal he'd tiredly ate
lay heavy deep within.

His age lined face, sun baked and dry,
fatigued, tired eyes half shut,
a ribbon red on jaw line shaved
where carelessly he'd cut.

Strains of "their" song filled the air
a smile played 'cross his lips,
he pictured his wife of fifty years
as she was all breasts and hips.

A tear he wiped from parchment cheek
a tear of loss and love,
two years now since she left his arms
to wait for him above.

Two years alive not living
he wanted off life's ride,
ready now in prayer he'd asked
to be taken to her side.












© 2017 Gee



Author's Note

Gee
Might have tenses muddled,confuse myself at times

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"He was ready now,in prayer he'd asked,
to be taken to her side,
two years alive, not living,
he wanted off life's ride. " ... Gee the entire poem was gorgeous - i have tiny suggestion - I would have loved to have read the second line in the stanza here as the finisher - its a showstopper of a line - a heartwrencher
:)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gee

2 Years Ago

Have made the tiny change.Suppose this one is subconsciously written from my point of view.No good m.. read more



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I can't imagine losing someone so close. The thoughts of death are very common when lost is such a way.

A sad poem Gee. It makes you think.

Posted 6 Days Ago


Gee

6 Days Ago

Thank you.........
Ah, so sad. It reminds me of my Dad after Mum died.
It must be difficult to be enthusiastic about life in many circumstances. One just has to carry on, I suppose.
Your tenses seem fine, and perfect format.

Posted 6 Days Ago


Gee

6 Days Ago

Thank you....
Great Aunt Astri

6 Days Ago

:}.....................
Strains of "their" song filled the air
a smile played 'cross his lips,

its a very emotional poem... thanks for sharing this one with us :)

Posted 1 Month Ago


Gee

1 Month Ago

Thank you for the r&r
Got a sort of Caribbean feel to this scene. Nicely descriptive and sentimental, catching the mixed feelings of loss and recall. Not so sure about the use of side twice though?

Posted 1 Month Ago


Gee

1 Month Ago

Never ever noticed that, what a knob. Have changed to arms !!
Thanks John
Tenderly sentimental

Great Read

Matthew

Posted 1 Month Ago


Gee

1 Month Ago

Thank you...
Matthew Kult

1 Month Ago

Welcome

Matthew
This is beautifully crafted with strong rhyme & rhythm. Love it! I have seen this man many times over. You've painted it so realistically, with careful but not overdone details - perfectly understated, just like this man. They are living alone in cabins & mobile homes, dotting the hills around me . . . (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Month Ago


Gee

1 Month Ago

Thank you..
Beautiful
Moving
Sentimental

Posted 3 Months Ago


Gee

3 Months Ago

Thank you..
Hello! I run an Instagram account that promotes the work of others, I am in love with this piece and was wondering if I’d be able to post it *you will be credited of course*

Posted 4 Months Ago


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Gee

1 Month Ago

No but thanks for reviewing
My grandpa prayed a lot and would talk out loud in his room to my grandma after she passed away. He missed her terribly.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

That's sad. If there is a God, which I doubt, I'd selfishly ask he take me before my wife as life wi.. read more
Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

It was heartbreaking to hear him tell her how much he missed her. They were married over 50 years wh.. read more
The title looks so crisp and creative.
Wow! You've described it so well to form images in my mind.
Kudos:)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Gee

8 Months Ago

Cheers......

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Added on January 2, 2015
Last Updated on November 15, 2017
Tags: love, loss, life, death.

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Milton keynes, Buckinghamshire, United Kingdom



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