Made for you

Even if I run I know eventually I'll fall behind. Trying to find a better place to get lost in the crowd. I take shot glass lovers to bed, they're not the kind to keep around. They bring dangerous things into your house. A slow dance with the devil, evaporating your sins into drunken rage of debts not yet paid. On sober feet I found my release baby, in a bullet made for you.

Reviews

[Paul Bell]

Taking shot glass lovers to bed, waking up in pane.
Dancing with the devil. Playing with guns. Okay your hormones have gone haywire. Step away from the computer now. Say after me. I need to relax more. Breathe in, breathe out. Children's poetry only from now on.

[Island Hippy]

Haha... aloha Paul, I've actually been reading what to expect when you're expecting...lol. You should have seen my husbands face when he read this...haha. Mahalo my friend :)

[Paul Bell]

You should milk this till the baby's born. lol

[Island Hippy]

Lol........

[Gee]

Tell your husband to stay up at your head. MR ISLAND HIPPY, STAY AWAY FROM THE BUSINESS END OTHERWISE YOU WILL END UP BEING A CELIBATE VEGETARIAN

[Island Hippy]

Aloha, lol... omg that's got me in fits of laughter. Mahalo :)

[Gee]

I made that mistake, my God, it was like a scene from Alien. All that was missing was a scary soundtrack and Sigourney Weaver. After witnessing THAT our newborn daughter was never going to be anything but an only child....

[andrew mitchell]

What the!!!!!!

[Island Hippy]

Lol... you guys :)

[Island Hippy]

Aloha Andrew :)

[Gee]

G'day Andrew, hope all is swell in Oz. I Wonder if gynaecologists like looking at pictures of women fully clothed, hmmmmmmm.

[Island Hippy]

I have no words... just laughter.

[andrew mitchell]

I wonder to sherlock

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Uh-oh- Jessica Rabbit is in the building! Like a film noir heroine, she struts to the bar and peruses the lineup of potential"shot glass lovers"....This girl is on fire Miss Izzy! Mesmerizing swagger and edgy imagery! "A slow dance with the devil, evaporating your sins into drunken rage of debts not yet paid"-slamming line!Hey, what's a nice girl like you doing in a poem like this??! Love it!

[Island Hippy]

Haha .... I could never possess that much swag, we can write a dark little day dream though :) Mahalo ohana x

[icelandicblue]

This is a most edgy piece. Our angst is acted out on a greater stage, our pain we hold onto tightly within ourselves. Bullets aren't always shot from guns.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha icelandicblue, I appreciate your great comment and time. Mahalo. Izzy

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the words shot-glass lovers. Sometimes less is better. You said a handful in the short poem. Sober feet and a bullet. A wild place to end at. Thank you Izzy for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo again John, your visits are so warm and generous :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed your work today and you are welcome dear Izzy.

[emmajoy]

Sharp words, insight, pain., cynicism, humour, pain... yet again. Tis hard to distinguish the emotions behind your words. However, no doubt, your mind and imagination were on a roll with this post, Izzy.

Off out for the day, but leaving affection and happy wishes for your day.. tomorrow, et al

[Island Hippy]

Aloha Em, I was listening to a song called Tennessee Blues when I wrote this :) a bit of bluesy pouring. Mahalo for your lovely wishes Em you're so sweet. i lā maika 'i - have a lovely day x

[Kittenincake]

"Trying to find a better place to get lost in the crowd. I take shot glass lovers to bed, they're not the kind to keep around." - Desolate and lonely feeling, great work pulling on heart strings.

"A slow dance with the devil, evaporating your sins into drunken rage of debts not yet paid." - Wow, haunting and foretelling. I would love if you wrote a part 2.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha, I appreciate your thoughtful words and your time. This was very off the cuff the mood set by some music I was listening to at the time. Mahalo :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Trying to find a better place to get lost in the crowd."
This line is so relatable... You wrote some really catchy phrases here like "slow dance with the devil", I think that devil resides in us... "in a bullet made for you", that's interesting.. threatening a little ;P

A fine write :))

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo Yumna I appreciate your visit.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Izzy. Always a pleasure 😊

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Love the terminology and the brutality described so well in the piece, that leads to a more brutal conclusion.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha John, I appreciate you taking the time to read. Mahalo :)