Summer

~ just a little scribble ~

art ~ garmash

 

 

Caught in the sigh of the ocean breeze

time seems to stand still

 

and today is as easy

as the lace tipped waves

chasing the seabirds into the sky

sharp cries fading with the crash of the tide

as the sun dances a smooth tango of diamond light

in perfect harmony

  

and me

            on the shore…

toes digging into the damp sand

teasing the sand crabs from their cool slumber

 

the breeze in my hair

the sun warm on my face

thinking…

 

absolutely nothing

 

Summer is here

             let time stand still….

Reviews

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

My dear friend what can I say about this.
A nice departure from your usual genre. I love the descriptions you captured so well. Things we all experience.
the breeze in my hair, the warm sun on my face, digging toes into the sand, etc.
The reader, me in this case, is slowed in the reading by your intelligent use of indents and spacings and that allows the images to build in the mind. It brings back forgotten moments.
Very well done.

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed this one. Summer is my favorite time of year...the ocean, the warm breeze, the serenity of it all...:) Julie

[Matching Socks]

This poems feels like a breathe of fresh air bringing peace, serenity, and an appreciation for the things that come alive in Summer.

I liked it a lot. :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[Anand Sehgal]

you almost took me to the shores for a sunbath. Awesome write. perfectly flavoured :)
delicious it was :)
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[MsJewel]

Thank you sweetie! :) Julie

[ms. barrie]

stunning poem...The imagery you captured in this write
is tranquil, reflective. You have an incredible talent for
soft, mystical words with depth that takes the reader
away. this is simply stunning.

I am a Floridian...I detest summers, but reading this,
makes it easier for me to deal with the humidity.

beautiful poem...thanks for sharing! :))

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your generous words my friend. Have a lovely evening :) Julie

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome, My friend :) - the pleasure was all mine...
wishing you the same! :))

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

I love it Brilliant I love the Ocean.



Thank you for your lovely review and comment and
sharing this wonderful piece.


I loved these stanza's lines.




Caught in the sigh of the ocean breeze

time seems to stand still



and today is as easy

as the lace tipped waves

chasing the seabirds into the sky

sharp cries fading with the crash of the tide

as the sun dances a smooth tango of diamond light

in perfect harmony



Blessings. Kindred poet

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment. I appreciate it very much :) Julie

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

you're very welcome . it's my pleasure always. blessings. kindred poet

[UmbraMesuria]

I'll be honest - the rest of the thing as a whole doesn't do much for me as it's nothing unprecedented, and I was ready to click away until those two lines caught my eye:

"sharp cries fading with the crash of the tide

as the sun dances a smooth tango of diamond light"

Brilliant! What a vivid and instantly imaginable picture. It looks like you really get into your groove and really shine when you describe movement rather than stillness, as the rest of the poem is fairly static ? Just a thought ;) (And I'm not a professional or claim to know loads and loads, just as an observer)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. I appreciate it. Have a lovely evening :) Julie

[UmbraMesuria]

No problem, you too!

[tudorfog]

A lovely piece, I particularly like the contrast of movement and serenity. :-)

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[Namrata]

the scene described is so beautiful, I actually wanna be there with the time not ending ever. Peace.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment :) Julie

[Souvik]

Brief and excellent depiction .. could visualize the whole thing :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[Tate Morgan]

I want to go to the beach this made me smile

[MsJewel]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you Tate :) Julie

[Fran Marie]

A sweet lovely poem,filled with the beauty of Summer and all its glory..nicely done.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind comment :) Julie