Big brown eyes

Big brown eyes

A Poem by Kari Kush

I cried for him nights and days
I thought he always felt the same
But months ago I found out the truth
That I loved him while he loved you
Now months went past and I lay in his bed
Reminiscing
Cause it feels like nothing has changed
Except he got to touch and slid inside
he got to play with what is mine
but not my heart or feelings this time
Cause big brown eyes left me to die
so now i'm dead with scars and lies
I now need sex to feel alive
so I came to him
I drove the miles
To see if maybe he can stick around a while
I prepared myself for when he leaves
Cause I know big brown eyes will never fall in love with me

© 2016 Kari Kush


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Kari Kush
Fix grammar and spelling thank u
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sad.

I wouldn't worry too much about grammar. verse is a little free form at any rate. spelling on the other hand... as far as I can see your spelling's fine.


Posted 2 Years Ago


Wow this is so sad but so well written

Posted 2 Years Ago


We do know. Sometimes we will accept less.
"I prepared myself for when he leaves
Cause I know big brown eyes will never fall in love with me"
I like the above ending. Thank you Kari for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


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this is very well done, you convey a sense of emotional pain really well

Posted 2 Years Ago


Kari Kush

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much if there's any way you can look at my other stuff that would be very appreciated
That is very painful, you did a great job of conveying that pain. Well done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Wow sounds painful nicely done girl

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Now months went past and I lay in his head

This is great. Two perspectives in one line.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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