Broken Hearts

Broken Hearts

A Poem by Sammi
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Have you ever wished you were a little kid again when you would only dream about your prince charming, and didnt acutally have to go through the pain of loving and loosing someone?

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Do you see the tears in my eyes?
They are trying to tell you that I'm sorry for everything that I did and that I am, because I know that every step I made I hurt you.
Do you see this empty heart with the pieces on the floor?
That's the result of what I did to you.  The result of how I made the mistake of letting you go even though you were my everything.
Lie to me and say that you're alright and we'll make it work, because that lie will give me hope for tomorrow.
You showed me your heart and I showed you mine. I promised that I wouldnt break it, but I broke that promise.
Tell me you love me and I'll put a smile on my face just for you and look ahead to tomorrow and say, "maybe one day he'll come to me."

 

© 2008 Sammi


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Speaking from a guys perspective, I must say two things. The first is that if you liked him that much and he let you then he is a dumbass and you are deserving of someone better. The second is that this is a powerful poem with an excellent message. The style is not one of the my favorites but there is nothing that I would change about the style, it is just a personal taste of mine. I like the flow and word choice. I also enjouyed the fact that you really let your emotion come through which makes the piece much much better and not at all clieche which is always something that is difficult to avoid with broken heart pieces. Very well done. Keep it up.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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"You showed me your heart and I showed you mine. I promised that I would break it, but I broke that promise." ~ You promised that you would break it? I think that is a mistype?

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Posted 15 Years Ago


Speaking from a guys perspective, I must say two things. The first is that if you liked him that much and he let you then he is a dumbass and you are deserving of someone better. The second is that this is a powerful poem with an excellent message. The style is not one of the my favorites but there is nothing that I would change about the style, it is just a personal taste of mine. I like the flow and word choice. I also enjouyed the fact that you really let your emotion come through which makes the piece much much better and not at all clieche which is always something that is difficult to avoid with broken heart pieces. Very well done. Keep it up.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is great.. I have a feeling one day the guy that hurt me will come back and say all of this to me... And all I can do is walk away. Thank you for sharing this. It was a great write!

Posted 15 Years Ago



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