Simplicity

Simplicity

A Poem by Keeley

 

Late August afternoons, the world, and our mothers,
could find us anchored hard by chalk masterpiece
paved upon eight houses cul-de-sac.
Each afternoon bore age nine routines-
stamp our existence onto dim cotton skirts,
juice box straw snug between chapped lips,
black Mary Janes loose about twenty toes.

 

August then was more like maple syrup-
sun sweet hours oozed between our knuckles,
seeping into concrete lines, like clockwork.
Through austere lashes we watched headlights
slow to pass before punch-buggies dragged after.
We wore late afternoons like sweaters that year,
handmade and warm against our skin.

© 2008 Keeley


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I love the image and the tone of this piece. A true awe inspired ode to the hot slow days of august when the summer end and the world once again slows down as children head back off to school. I think the last line is my favorite because it contrasted two elements that are associated by thier warmth (sweaters and August) and wove them into a single idea or thought. Great piece with all the elements needed to allow the reader to feel, and smell the end of summer and the start of fall.

Posted 15 Years Ago


The sentiments and the imagery are terrific. I had a little trouble with the ending, though. I felt like it needed something more. Nice work.

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Added on August 7, 2008

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Keeley
Keeley

Marietta, GA



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