Raven of True Virtue

Tell me it's true,

my raven of virtue,

as sure as your feathers are dark,

it's true that I have missed you.

 

From your lofty perch,

you gaze upon my world,

bemused by all that happens,

whilst the tragedy unfolds.

 

Where will it end?

I imagine that you wonder,

as each passing day,

another business "goes under".

 

How long must I wait,

to see some strength return,

to my poor cynical mind,

or should I live in hope no more?

 

Complacency in politics,

no more "big ideas",

and with each passing moment,

catastrophe seems near.....

Reviews

[Ligeia]

Great poem, but for some reason I don't feel as though it's concluded.
You ended it a bit abruptly, but perhaps that was your goal.

Don't get me wrong, I enjoyed this.
I love the symbol of the raven, it reminds me of Poe and although you used it in this poem you made it entirely your own.
I find that quite admirable, keep up the good work.

Thank you very much for sharing this.

[Marie Harrison]

Clever poem. I like it.

[Livana Lowell]

Like the symbolism of the Raven portraying it as that one third eye that observes all or the world bring forth truth that people often reject.

I like abrupt ending. It leaves the reader quite dazzled or it might've been me.

Anyways, I like that you went into the point of view of the Raven creating an airy mood. I really enjoyed this.

[K. Carver]

Ah. I love it.
Very nice.
Gives the sense that the worst is upon you.
Well done.

[Vertigo]

hmm beautifully written

[JC]

Nicely done Julian...

I have to agree and disagree on some of the previous posts. I agree that this seems unfinished some how, like there is more to say.

I disagree on the comparison of Poe's raven to yours. Poe's Raven was used as a metaphor for questions we already know the answer too. In your raven, we are seeking an answer.

Nice meter as well.


JC

[Sean M. Addams]

very nice piece like the imagery and detail in this... overall very nicely done...

[Stacey Watts]

Nicely written piece. Very true to what our world is going through at the moment. Excellent piece

[Lauren Marie]

I always love how your poetry deals with issues, but the way you portray them (as in through the eyes of a raven) it's almost like we needn't worry about what's happening, because in the end, we will be fine.
At least that's what I feel when I read this.
~Lauren

[Akina]

great written Julian. so beautiful.
amazing job.

Akina