In Love. . .

Love makes us a colorful butterfly..

“Close your eyes”

“What for? ?”

“Shhh.. just do it..”

“Okay..”

 

Air started losing it’s strength..

Vacuum started to fill the gap..

My heart’s race speeded up.

Your lips urged and came near..

came near to.. came near to mine..

It’s sweetness touched my eyes..

my nose.. then.. then.. it’s destiny..

 

At the same time, your fingers touched

my fingers.. held it.. distance

reduced.. Tightness became tighter..

My adrenaline even was feared.. afraid of..

My mind could only draw, redraw, re- redraw

your picture...

 

Eyes urged to see your face.. your feel of me..

my face in your eyes.. When eyelids

gave a way to see your face, your eyelids

became another wing to close mine..

I was moved..

 

 

Your hands slowly, surrounded my waist..

tightly.. tighter.. without my intervention

my lips touched your’s..

 

Suddenly legs lost in the battle of

holding your love and knees bent..

You eventually put your hand under

my legs and raised.. took me..

carried me to the lawn.. placed me slowly

upon the grass and came near me..

I could say this by your fragrance..

You whispered I love you my ammu..

Eyes forced it’s water to see you..

You caught it, told I am your ’s ..

Will you marry me again ??

 

How could I propose better than

giving you a hug flooded with kisses….. ? ! !!!!!

 

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the story in the poem. Gentle erotic thoughts and places led to perfect ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ralph Rosell]

Love the beginning, the way you create this nervous yet I love you to death rythm from the narrators point of view. Nicely written!

[Willard Wells]

Very loving relationship and love. Thanks for sharing.

[Mitali Shah]

simply romantic :) the feelings, the flow, emotions :)

[Kousika]

Thanks dear..

[Chirag Kumar]

The flow of this poem is amazing. It kept me engaged in the poem to know what would happen next. One of the most romantic poems I have ever read. Lovely :D

[Kousika]

Thanks for your kind comments..

[Kat]

I enjoyed reading this, it is very sweet and beautiful. I think it is very well written as well. Keep up the writing!

[Kousika]

Thanks for your kind review...

[Perkele.7885]

I liked the slow sensual build up with nice normal word exchange.The build up was right on time and I was wondering how you were going to handle this. The broken words was a workable idea. kudus there. I was caught off guard with "will you marry me again line"!

[Kousika]

Thank you so much for your kindness and concern.. How was my handling in the end ?? :))

[Perkele.7885]

To be honest, I think that you need something more sultry or provocative or evocative and the reader will supply their own immediate ending. The couple is already married(the marriage line), so you using the propose word does not fit. The word proposition would fit very nicely though!+

[Kousika]

oh thank you.. surely i will keep in mind...

[Kousika]

My feel in this situation goes like this.. How about you ??

[Shubham Joshi]

Wow this is brilliant, beautiful, fantastic and all words of praise will always be less. It's a beautiful description of the situation that you have given here and 'a hug flooded with kisses' was beautiful.

[Kousika]

Oh .. Thank you Joshi.. Hope you loved it..