Cukoo Clock

Just a moment of randomness I had

I lie on the bench

 In the park

As I listen to my cuckoo clock

I came here last night

As if I was a wondering sprite

Wondering Where’s my sock?

 

The dark tint in her eyes

Being scoured by flies

As she hears the tick tock

I grab my bag

As I feel so sad

And I go and join the flock

 

Yet as I lay

Feeling the spray

Of the morning’s brisk dew

I know I’m lost

But I have my clock

And I no longer need you

Reviews

[A.Lee]

This is good! I love poems centered around random objects or concepts. It shows a writers creativity.

[Frantzuu]

Great poem, this one is very descriptive, it brings out the imagery. Great write, keep writing and never stop. :D

[Freder Fredersen (aka G..]

Very nicely written.
great flow.
cheers!

[Jacqueline Lopez]

Even though, you wrote it in a moment of randomness, simply beautiful. I love the rhyming, plus it flowed smoothly.

[Poeticpiers]

amusing flow of thoughts

[Elissa; the genuine art..]

This is such an edgy write.
Really makes your mind wander.
Great work!

-Elissa :D

[SK Woodiwiss]

Unnerving. Thoughts of infidelity and madness both can play major roles in this work. With the last lines - a sort of you don't matter to me attitude, I lean more toward infidelity - but of course I could be way off the mark. The bottom line to me is a very deep resentment which brings forth sadness of something lost that shouldn't be.
Very well done, as you I hope you can see from my review - you have been very successful in evoking emotion as well as thought.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

great write:)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I enjoyed this poem. I liked it a lot. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is very good. I like the movement and flow of words in the poem. You told a good story. Ending was perfect. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote