Alchemy

Alchemy

A Poem by Levioshock
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Just a poem on the basic premise of alchemy

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If you search for the elixir

Eternity waits

Mastering the protoscience

Longevity creates

                                 

Join together the elements

Your life will be prone

Such things in life aren’t relevant

As the philosopher Stone

 

© 2010 Levioshock


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A great short and to the point about what life is about.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lovely, simplistic with a great flow and a fantastic subject.

~Shannon

Posted 8 Years Ago


-mind travels to Fullmetal Alchemist-

Lol nice job! The flow is spectacular!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice work...

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like it

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I like that you used a tough subject to write a poem about- just keep in mind that poems are meant to be read out loud- there are some lines that are a syllable too long. Technically, you could keep them the same, but it would sound better if you trimmed them down.

Posted 8 Years Ago


great write

Posted 8 Years Ago


A poem with a complete story in so few words. I wish I could hold a philosopher stone when I was young. Old age allow mistakes and error to teach you the right ways. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


Short and mystical. I'm having to really study the words to figure it out. Though the most basic concept here I think is that immortality is worth the peril involved in acquiring it. And yet, that's looking at the poem from a fantasy perspective, in that you might have used the philosopher's stone as a metaphor for something more concrete, like life itself...

Thought provoking.

-Dream

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Levioshock
Levioshock

Copley, OH



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