Inside the Falls

I am the rush

and the wind to pull you down

I am

gravity

in a whisper

and in a roar

I am

coming from high

to course low

into the Earth

one touch of me

my cool sweetness

and you cannot resist

once inside

you are

in the falls

ride me down

past the edge.....

Reviews

[Evil_Angel]

Ohhh i love the first lines. I am the wind to pull you down...i love all of it its very sexy and commanding!

[Dani California]

I feel oddly seduced into riding the falls... though doing so would likely cause my demise. Your imagery is highly hypnotic and entrancing. A short piece, but powerful, indeed.

my cool sweetness
and you cannot resist
once inside
you are
in the falls
ride me down
past the edge.....


Excellent work, Lori!

[bluessadmood]

this is nice and exciting,i am the wind ,strong as gravity ,one sweet touch of me,and you go down these wonderful falls once inside,you will feel ever going down,so sweet fall deep into me,feelings you have never felt before,so overwhelming,endless journey of sweet happiness,great sweet words ,feelings and wonderful images

[Spoken]

i agree, seductive.. enticing one to dive in your waterfall and feel the rush of your current taking them to the edge of passion... or maybe just the waterfall itself enticing people to jump in for the feel of cool waters... it could be interprated different ways... and that's great poetry. a subtle depth in your words. well written piece

[Jarrett]

This poem seems to me to have a sort of seductive tone to it; like a thoughtful description of a passionate love- but that's just my take on it (it may or may not be about a waterfall).
Nonetheless, a well-written piece. Passionate, like I said before.