Over

She has o control over me

She is out she is gone
I have never felt such bliss
is this what freedom taste like
i can now enjoy my life
She no longer haunts my dreams
No longer ruins my days
Its finally done
Its over

Author's Note

She always had control over me and i finally broke through the spell and i now control my life and my happiness

Reviews

[Katie]

She is out, she is gone
I have never felt such bliss.
Is this what freedsom tastes like.
I can now enjoy my life.
She no longer haunts my dreams,
No longer ruins me days.
It's finally done.
It's over.

Poems need punctuation too. And grammar.

It's a good poem aside from what I stated above. you express your emotion well, which is good, because its been a while since I've seen a poem that does (not from you just in general). I like the tone at the end the sense of finality. Excellent Poem, well done.

[No name]

Might need a little work with the grammar but besides that it was a great poem. You expressed yourself and your feelings. Nice write.

[Alex Miller<3]

Grammer might not be the best but who cares considering you're doing something that you love. Great poem and happy for you! :)

[shy wolf]

i liked this poem. its hard to say goodby to a relationship, even when its bad. i like the positive outlook at a time when most people would be negative. keep writting

[Cody Wiggins]

i rule

[emona]

hahaha thats what imma be saying about my mom when i move out

[A Risen Heroine.]

This is awesome, I like the way you express it.
I like it.
Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work.

~A Fallen Heroine~

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

Really liked the dark concept and bluntness of leaving someone but with the freedom you now emulate a positive outlook I look forward to reading future pieces well done a great write

[SarahCortland]

good job its a good feeling to be free when we have been trapped for so long. its like you said bliss you expressed the feeling greatly and i truly enjoyed this because even as a girl i can relate to this. So great job 100/100 :) loved it!!!!!