The Time She Lost

The Time She Lost

A Poem by yuhee
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The time keeps on running without waiting for her.

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For a thousand years
she kept waiting for the love that will never return back

For long teary nights
she kept praying that till now left unanswered

And for eternity,
she'll keep on crying for the lost time she had wasted for him

© 2017 yuhee


Author's Note

yuhee
Just got bored~ Spare me a while. Thanks.

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So heart touching. I loved it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

yuhee

7 Years Ago

Thank you.
Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

You're welcome ☺
A small gem, needs some polishing.

I like the structure and the thoughts. Very good for a "bored" effort.

Distracting bits:
"return back" -- redundant.
"she kept praying that till now left unanswered" -- seems incomplete. I would prefer something like "she kept pray for attention till now unrequited"



Posted 7 Years Ago


yuhee

7 Years Ago

Oh thank you very much for correcting it. I reallyvappreciated your criticism.
Reading this it's like time stopped for just a brief moment... and I'm that moment I saw a glimpse of her in me

Posted 7 Years Ago


yuhee

7 Years Ago

Thanks for reading.

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Added on March 13, 2017
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yuhee

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