Too Much, Too Fast

Too Much, Too Fast

A Poem by Marianne Rose
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When I am overwhelmed by the idea I have too little time . . .or too much to grieve for such a small vessel.

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Time runs too fast through the hourglass,
heating up the container
to produce minute cracks.
Pushing sand through
too small a space,
the vessel breaks.
Shattered shards burst outward
filling the carpet with irritating specks
that stick to bare feet
and make them bleed.

© 2016 Marianne Rose



Author's Note

Marianne Rose
Not my typical style, but I'm not in my typical mood these days.

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I'm only 19 and I can already see the effects of life. The days turn into weeks, into months, into years in the blink of an eye. Sad, but true. Scares me to think I'll be 20 next month. How much time I feel as though I have already wasted. This poem makes me wish I was just a kid again when nothing really mattered. Back to the good ole days! Great write!

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Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Back to the good ole days- yes, but then I keep thinking, what time period would I go back to? Life .. read more



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I loved it a lot!
It doesn't matter whether you're 15 or 50- time flies by so quickly in the blink of an eye....And your poem depicted it so beautifully :)


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your wonderful review- makes me want to get back In poem mode again- been captured by .. read more
Yashita Arora

1 Year Ago

Haha I can understand your feeling.... There's never enough time... You have to find out time for yo.. read more
I'm only 19 and I can already see the effects of life. The days turn into weeks, into months, into years in the blink of an eye. Sad, but true. Scares me to think I'll be 20 next month. How much time I feel as though I have already wasted. This poem makes me wish I was just a kid again when nothing really mattered. Back to the good ole days! Great write!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Back to the good ole days- yes, but then I keep thinking, what time period would I go back to? Life .. read more
Was the slant rhyme in this intentional...because I absolutely loved it. It really gave this piece an eerie feeling. I loved the imagery in this poem also; it created an intensity reminiscent of how time can seem like our worst enemy...even during the happy times (because even when we're happy, we know the moment won't/can't last forever). As for this "not" being your "typical style," I really don't think that matters. Poetry is meant to convey emotion (in most cases), and for as long as it does that, I think style is irrelevant. Great job on this piece.

-William Liston

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Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

I'm so glad you liked the unusual not quite but almost rhyming- that's just the way I heard it. Than.. read more
The world is moving at a speed of 1300 miles per hour, with that fast pace our life seems too much to handle at once... I loved the imageries you have brought here... It reminds me how quickly we are getting older and experienced in life, even a single breath is a new experience...

Moments of grief and pain are hard to go through, we feel like we don't have the strength to keep on moving with the timer but in those moments our creator create something more meaningful inside of us which we hardly realise that time but they show up when we cope with the grief... I know the feelings behind this write and I'm touched by the simplicity of your heart that creates these outstanding pieces... Superb... May God take you through whatever challenges you are going through... Know that I'm praying and thinking of you...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Thank you my friend- such a loving, accepting review filled with reflections and encouragement that .. read more
love this piece...sometimes we just burst at the seams because we cannot fit into the life that is laid before us...or that we have put our emotions into...

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Yes, exactly. Once the cracks start, it's hard to turn back the inevitable shattering. This is a poe.. read more
i think this is really well done...
the hourglass pours- and enters a new visual
of being cracked under our feet
only to make them bleed.

interesting quote to give us a clue about how grief feels.
consuming, overtaking, never ending...

i wonder what beauties can be created with the sand stuck in the carpet...
if it could be gathered back up, and heated into glass...
and i trail.

but you allow me to... can grief turn into something different than what it is at the moment?

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the wonderful review- and yes, just as pieces of glass and broken china can create a step.. read more
I understand this poem. Almost sixty years old and time is moving too quickly. I liked your description of time. The hourglass can empty quickly. We must use our time wisely. Thank you Marianne for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

Thank you Coyote for sharing your experience and for this kind review. Yes, I turned 60 this year. B.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

We are still young my friend and you are welcome.

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Marianne Rose
Marianne Rose

Santa Rosa, CA



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