Lifeless Cube

The Sunlight passes through the tube,

 Making a glowing sphere on my wall.

I sit in the corner,

Inside this lifeless cube

Ink flows through steel nib,

On the blank papers

My thoughts crawl…

Reviews

[Mashoosh Kateb]

I really enjoyed this piece. Flows very well.

My thoughts crawl... That's how I feel too sometimes

[Mayank]

Thank you Mashoosh

[Chirag Kumar]

Excellent piece of work Mayank. Loved it. Keep writing more :)

[Mayank]

Thank you Kumar!

[The dark story]

"On the blank paper my thoughts crawl"

That is the very captivating line. Nice.

[Roshan Nair]

This piece gets more teeth and bone as you keep reading, I like the intensity you brought in forsaking cadence. Its raw and refreshing. Great work man! cheers

[Mayank]

Thanks Roshan!

[Sindu]

I love decreasing rhythms. You beautifully striped the life off it's lifelessness. I think you are in a good position as you are.

[Mayank]

Yeah, sort off... Whisky blues.

[Sindu]

oh haha.. then I can't relate

[Anahat]

Very nicely penned! LOved it :)

[Mayank]

Thanks dear...

[Pryde Foltz]

Inside this lifeless cube
Ink flows through steel nib,
On the blank papers
My thoughts crawl…

The 9 to 5 drain. Great write here, Mayank.

[Mayank]

YOU GOT ME!!!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Very well written Mayank.The writer and all the thoughts that tumble around our heads until they finally make sense when we pen them on paper :)

[Mayank]

thanks Vidya!

[Gabby Nieves]

Love the imagery and feel to this. Short and sweet, good job.

[Mayank]

Thanks Gabby!

[Zahra]

Wow very nice imagery... describing a writer going through creative process. Well penned

[Mayank]

Thank you so much!