4th of July

Sparks in the sky..

Bursting in colors..

Taking me high..

Amusing I..

With your sounds..

Never failing to amaze I..

Flamed high..

Tickling my nose..

Burning in the sky..

Naturally we ignite, and I..

The sensation of your touch..

Never allowing the fire to die, and I..

Love how we would touch the sky..

With your taste..

Taking me high..

Up in the sky..

Together..

And High..

You and I..

Popping like the 4th of July.

Author's Note

I purposely repeatedly used the words: I, sky and high. I hope you guys understand where I was going with this.

Reviews

[Ashley Lytle]

I liked this a lot. The visual I received as well as the sounds I could hear in my mind were only there because of the vivid visuals you painted with your words.

[Writergirl]

Very vivid, I like it :) Almost sounds like it could be made into a song

[Tamika Finley]

Thanks so much! I've never thought about my works becoming music, I actually never thought to write poetry until about 5 months ago when I first started

[Sue]

I heard a melody when I read the poem. It's sounds pretty lyrical, and could make a nice song. Maybe you could write music too, Tamika?

[Tamika Finley]

I'll definitely check it out, try it out. if I feel it could lead somewhere I'll continue.

[Sue]

I think it could. If you get in with the right people, find a good singer and producer and ship your work out to some labels (many indie labels look for good song writers), you could make the next hit! However, be sure to copyright your work first though, just to be safe ;)

[Tamika Finley]

thank you! how do I copy right?

[Sue]

You can copyright online at http://copyright.gov/eco/. Once there you can create an account, you can submit one piece for $35 or submit multiple works for $55. I believe you can submit the lyrics to a song by itself without audio. Once you've entered all of your information (what you've written, when you wrote it, etc...), you upload your piece and you'll receive an email referring to your submission!

Though it takes a few months to receive notification of acceptance (most people are accepted) or rejection, the email you receive will be instant and is usually strong enough to protect what you've written against plagiarism. You can submit your work to the copyright office by mail, however, the process takes longer (I think it's at least 6 months).

I hope this helps and good luck!

[Tamika Finley]

it does. thank you so much

[Sue]

No problem ;)

[Chris]

Has a good tone and rhythm - would work as spoken word.

[Tamika Finley]

Thanks a lot. What's spoken word?

[Chris]

Giving an oral presentation at an Open Mic Event - Poets present (not necessarily read) from a stage/dias one or more of their pieces to a live audience. Look up a Poetry Slam Event on the internet. Its one hell of a good show - powerful presentations from dedicated poets at the top of their Game. Sweet to see, great to attend, Kickass to present!

[Tamika Finley]

Oh okay I understand what it is now. The high school I went to would have poetry slams. But it's kind of weird but my oral presentation skills aren't as well as my writing skills. I'm going to work on it though. Thanks a lot though

[Chris]

Just be Real and let YOUR heart come out your lips... feel what you say - walk your talk and WHAP!! Bring it and don't look back!

[Tamika Finley]

Great advice. Just let it all flow naturally basically. I'll take it all into consideration

[Chris]

It's what poets do - bring it

[Chris]

What's going to be your major? And watch watch your money well - don't mortgage your future so far ahead that you don't have one.

[Tamika Finley]

I'm majoring in chemistry but I'm trying to make it so that I'm minoring in journalism. I will try to watch my money well I promise.

[Chris]

Rock the world then girl! Kick the stars and grab it like you mean it.

[Tamika Finley]

You know I will!