Cursed Love

Cursed Love

A Poem by Hopelessly Confused
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A boys feelings for a girl.

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I'm cursed by her
This beautiful killer
She's conquered my mind
And has started killing me from the inside.

When she screams,
My throat aches.
When she cries,
My eyes water.
When she hurts,
My pain is unbearable.

I can't stand
This unmerciful control she has over me.
Does she even realize,
the power she wields?
She's destroying me
Yet in my pain I have fallen for her.

I love her
Her beauty keeps me just inches away from the darkness.
I would surely die for her
But what she really needs
Is me to live for her.


© 2009 Hopelessly Confused



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A wonderful poem. 'I would surely die for her, but what she really needs, is me to live for her', this speaks millions in just a few small words. It sounds what you have is worth holding on to. The second stanza also confirms this, love like this is rare. Thanks for sharing and allowing me to reminise.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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She's destroying me
Yet in my pain I have fallen for her.
I love her
Her beauty keeps me just inches away from the darkness.
I would surely die for her
But what she really needs
Is me to live for her. Beautifully written...loved the ending lines! Great job!

Posted 3 Years Ago


hauntingly beautiful poem about love, deep, dark love. I have felt this way about a girl only once, and she tore my heart out. Anyway, this poem reminds me of that. Very good peice indeed.

Posted 3 Years Ago


When she screams,
My throat aches.
When she cries,
My eyes water.
When she hurts,
My pain is unbearable.

A beautiful and unbeatable love. Wholly dedicated. Great one.

Posted 3 Years Ago


The first stanza evoked an image of a succubus; she is the seductress of the night. The speaker reminds me of a lovesick vampire. In mythology, vampires are depicted as creatures of obsession. The man struggles with his attraction to this mortal woman, and therefore, he watches her from a distance. Near the end, she does not appear to be the succubus that was seen in the beginning. He rationalizes his passion; he convinces himself that she is causing this subconsciously. However, he realizes that she is innocence in the following line: "Her beauty keeps me just inches away from the darkness." The man decides to "live for her" by leaving her be so he does not break the illusion he has of her.

"Cursed Love" is a Gothic delight that the audience will eat up. I, for one, enjoyed this fantasy. Thank you for sharing!

sincerely,
ria

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This explains so much in such a beautiful and crafty way. Lovely piece.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Love this poem, it's amazing, well done for creating something so beautiful! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


She drags you into a darkness, without realizing the power she holds; your heart. Truly beautiful.

Posted 4 Years Ago


This is beautiful in way I cannot even begin to explain. I really love this. Thank you and well done :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


soo amazing poem :) i love it

Posted 4 Years Ago


The feelings you've incorporated/implemented into this is amazing, and the whole thing speaks out to me if I'm quite honest. The bit that gets me is 'does she even realise,/ the power she wields?' Great lines. Its also quite true for a vast number of boys, especially those whom one would not expect to have such feelings for a girl.

Beautiful writing!

Posted 4 Years Ago



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Tags: Dark, Fantasy, Hope, Life, Love, Pain, Sad, Thoughts, Abuse, Passion

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Hopelessly Confused
Hopelessly Confused

Tallahassee, U.S. Virgin Islands



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