The Beginning

The Beginning

A Story by Nirupama.H
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It somehow felt right to do it now . He took a handful of coarse , brown sand and poured it into the hourglass.
TIME BEGAN
PROGRESS BEGAN
The grains rubbed against the smooth glass , struggling to make their way through the small orifice ; waiting for none , showing no sympathy for the slower grains pushed to the sides.
He sat watching it , observing the nature and character of His new Creation ; unaware that it was a whole new dimension in itself . A dimension which took away stillness and brought motion . Once created , time refused to stop. He realized that it was a ruthless creature that he had created . It rubbed and rubbed and rubbed , scarring the very glass that contained it .The grains rushed and pushed only to ultimately fall into the lump of another ten thousand identical ones . 
He realized that it was Time to move on.He could do nothing now.He knew that he could not watch it forever because forever now existed .He also knew that one day , all the sand would reach the bottom and the hourglass would have to be overturned

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A different view of the beginning of time but the beginning of time does not necessarily mark the beginning of progress for what man considers progress will ultimately result in his destruction and then the hour glass will have to be turned over. Very meaningful write

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Nirupama.H

2 Years Ago

Thanks a lot !!



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I love the way you have described the beginning of time.. Very creative... "A ruthless creature had been created"
Simply beautiful...A very creative piece.. Enjoyed it... :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Nirupama.H

2 Years Ago

thank you !!
This is very beautiful. It is very unique, I like it.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Interesting read. "waiting gor none" to "waiting for non". Nicely done and I like the thoughts that it brings to me of who is handling the hourglass.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Nirupama.H

2 Years Ago

thank you. Didn't see the typo :)
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Either, way, smooth, granular, or combination, sooner or later, the glass wood have to be turned over! All that has been affected is the actual time for the event and that is going to depend upon the smoothness of the glass, the diameter of the opening and the granular make up of the material in motion!


Posted 2 Years Ago


A unique perspective in this story... I really enjoyed it. Good work my friend :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nirupama.H

2 Years Ago

Thank you !!
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Hi Nirupama Harikumar. I just love where you have gone with this story and wonder at the circumstances of the inspiration!!! True!! Once we learn of the existence of time, we have to adnit there is also infinity, but as you say, it must end at some point!! loved this, alf

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nirupama.H

2 Years Ago

Thank you !!!
A different view of the beginning of time but the beginning of time does not necessarily mark the beginning of progress for what man considers progress will ultimately result in his destruction and then the hour glass will have to be turned over. Very meaningful write

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nirupama.H

2 Years Ago

Thanks a lot !!
Yes, I thought this was quite good, very interesting, unique perspective!

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Nirupama.H

2 Years Ago

Thanks a lot !
I recommend more space in the blocking. Un-chunk it so that the sentences have breath, open the door and walk into this thing and tell us more about what is in between the grains.. Good short piece.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Nirupama.H

2 Years Ago

Thank you for the suggestions . I really appreciate it . Yes , I think un-chunking it is a good idea.. read more
Scott Durham

2 Years Ago

Peace and good work ahead- for us all!
Please do let me know what you 're thinking since I really don't know how others will perceive this piece !!

Posted 2 Years Ago



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