Alone

Alone

A Story by Dhanadeepa Dixit
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Horror Story in twelve words or less. (:

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Twisted, mutilated fingers trace your skin. 

...At least you're not alone .

Anymore. (:

© 2015 Dhanadeepa Dixit



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That gave me the chills, but only one suggestion *you're*
I know, I'm sorry... I'm one of those people.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Dhanadeepa Dixit

2 Years Ago

Haha! Good catch Amory! I'm surprised nobody else on here caught it, or myself for that matter. You .. read more
Amory Grey

2 Years Ago

Haha thank you, and no problem.
Here's my revision: "... trace your skin." And "...you're no.. read more
Short but so full of messages
and a most definite a horror

Loving the Halloween feel taking over WC

Posted 2 Years Ago


Nice, i didn't need to sleep tonight anyway ;)

I don't know why, but that smiley at the end makes it even more scary. Good job.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dhanadeepa Dixit

2 Years Ago

Thank you Lavorther!!! I'm glad you noticed the intended effect the smiley had. (:
I'm going to go ahead and assume the previous reviewer saw a different version. This was well done!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dhanadeepa Dixit

2 Years Ago

Thank you Brianna! I think he didn't know that this had to be a twelve word story for the contest. A.. read more
Briana

2 Years Ago

Wait, re-reading his review made it more clear. He was suggesting that you replace the word "skin" w.. read more
I like it as is, but I substituted "cheek", "neck", and "ear" for "skin"; and could feel it just a tad more. Perhaps I'm too sensitive and will shudder when the tiny hairs on the back of my ear are touched.


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dhanadeepa Dixit

2 Years Ago

yea, I agree that those substitutions could have made this story a little scarier. However it was wr.. read more

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Added on September 26, 2015
Last Updated on September 30, 2015
Tags: Horror, short

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Dhanadeepa Dixit
Dhanadeepa Dixit

Cambridge, MA



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I'm a college student, originally from Kashmir, and my goal in writing is to change how we see the world. My favorite book is a Thousand Splendid Suns. more..

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