Revolution

I see on a side walk

All my hopes and dreams

Written on a border 

Framed with lines 

Filed on some stamps

My children are bare

Playing with coke cans

They never had a chance to try

I sit by your door

Looking into a shopping cart

Filled with empty air

As you lend me a scarf

I got my share

Taken is mine

Digested in your stomach 

Last night's dinner

Thrown out 

I stood at a welfare line

Some rung bells for my salvation

Till my toes pierced just another pair

I talked to you

As you walked off 

In your brand new kicks 

Reviews

[PhillipCalitz12]

what a powerful piece. its so sad , but so beautiful.the pacing is quite good. well done , well written , and keep going

[Olivia]

i love this so much! i wish i wrote this. so accurate and just great, everything i feel

[B]

Thank you Olivia

[Wannabewriter16]

The poverty we live in today...no words do I have to explain what I want to say. I do love this thoiugh.

[B]

Thank you ......................

[Deepak Belbase]

We all talk about poverty but we afraid to help the people. it's a major problem in the world we always ignore the thing that is necessary for concern. It's a comedy(as in Italian there is two form of art tragedy belongs to art and comedy belongs to people). But it's a terrifying comedy...

[B]

Poverty is the one disaster that is truly and fully man made
and can be remedied by man

but who cares
as long as we get what we want
who cares about those who do not get anything at all

Poverty would have been demolished if man was less selfish

Thank you for your kind words

[Deepak Belbase]

ur welcome!

[dan]

A very appropriately sad piece that raises a subject a lot of people care to ignore, poverty homelessness and hunger. This is written in such a way as the two line couplets you choose as your format really enhances the impact of the words, emphasis is so well placed! Very well done, young lady! take care...dan

[B]

Thank you Dan

[dan]

Nisreen, Your comment back seems like maybe I've done something to upset you. I hope that isn't so, and IF so I apologize deeply. Please continue sending me RRs? Thank you! take care...dan

[B]

Ofcourse not
you never upset me
i love talking with you

I will send you many
Happy new year Dan :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

such a lovely work to read, fantastic job

[B]

Thank you so much

[usman]

amazing,i guess this is one of your best ,very sensational

[B]

Thank you Usman

[A.marie.speaks]

So original, as always :) I really loved the contradictions you played out. This is something I can read and ruminate in. Thank you for giving me something to chew on!

[B]

Thank you for your kind words :)

[Emily]

Love it!
I really like the meaning!
Keep it up!!

[B]

Thank you E

[Aries1984]

I have to agree here. Really good reflection. I did something similar with a poem about sitting on a bench and observing city life here in Seattle. That's what this kind of reminded me of.

[B]

Thank you :)