My Heart In His Mind

My Heart In His Mind

A Poem by Priyanshi


Am an imagination of a beautiful mind I guess,

 Or am a sacred heart in someone's pure heart.

Who, himself is the purest diamond of my heart.

He's  the diamond that'll  make my heart shine,

All the time, for the whole life.

Am an angel of his clean mind I guess,

He sketches me in his mind with his thoughts.

But my mind plays with him in my dreams.

And God witnesses my happiness with him.

And I'll keep him in ecstasy throughout his life.

 Throughout my life, on the road of life.


© 2017 Priyanshi



Author's Note

Priyanshi
Title by Surya...
Thank you, Surya.

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I love the way there's a slight uncertainty from the narrator, as if she's almost afraid to believe that she's on this guy's mind so much. I love the title & the theme of being the focus of another person's imaginings. These thoughts & feelings are well expressed thru-out. My only drawback is the way you use the word "heart" so much. I think there could be other ways to say this, so it doesn't sound repetitive. Heart is over-used in poetry. It's good to find new ways to say the things that have been said the same way over & over. But this doesn't detract from the way your message builds up to a heartfelt ending.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Priyanshi

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much, friend...am glad to read the review...The title was by Surya.....Thanks him a lot.. read more



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"Am an angel of his clean mind I guess,
He sketches me in his mind with his thoughts."

Realizing and becoming what another imagines and wants from and for you - this is the right way to say that.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Priyanshi

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much, Carol, for the lovely review.
I love the way there's a slight uncertainty from the narrator, as if she's almost afraid to believe that she's on this guy's mind so much. I love the title & the theme of being the focus of another person's imaginings. These thoughts & feelings are well expressed thru-out. My only drawback is the way you use the word "heart" so much. I think there could be other ways to say this, so it doesn't sound repetitive. Heart is over-used in poetry. It's good to find new ways to say the things that have been said the same way over & over. But this doesn't detract from the way your message builds up to a heartfelt ending.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Priyanshi

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much, friend...am glad to read the review...The title was by Surya.....Thanks him a lot.. read more
This is beautiful , priyanshi ...keep writing ❤

Posted 1 Month Ago


Priyanshi

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much, dear for the lovely review.
One can feel the passion while reading it. Nice one.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Priyanshi

1 Month Ago

Thank you, friend, for your lovely visit and review.
Thanks to you dear....a lot...
Thanks for the poem, of course that's a kind heart of your's....
By the way very good work...I loved it...:)

Posted 1 Month Ago


Priyanshi

1 Month Ago

Thank you soooo much.
chal pagley , taareef se maarega kya.hahaha...Thank you for the lovely.. read more
Surya

1 Month Ago

Hahaha...a pleasure n thank you...:)
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SSR
Beautiful feelings.......
Or am a sacred heart in someone's pure heart.
Who, himself is the purest diamond of my heart

Perfectly sprinkled.......
Keep the good work Priyanshi

Posted 1 Month Ago


Priyanshi

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much, SSR . I'm glad for the lovely review.
Sweet and heart warming words. I really enjoyed this poem.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Priyanshi

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much, Najam for the lovely review.
Najam Us Saher

1 Month Ago

You're most welcome.
An emotional, beautiful and powerful poem Priyanka!
Well done, keep it up :))

Posted 1 Month Ago


Priyanshi

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much, for the lovely review.
Mr.Writer

1 Month Ago

No problem :)
beautiful words of love,throughout your life

Posted 1 Month Ago


Priyanshi

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much , Wordman for the lovely review.
 wordman

1 Month Ago

my pleasure
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