I Am You

If you are the knife

I’m your glinting edge

If you are the whip

I’m your scintillating lash

If you are a fatal arrow

I'm the Curare on your tip

Can a bull be a bull

Without its horns?

Or a snake be revered

Without its venom?

I am the bloodiest part of you

Nurture me deep

Within your belly

Your bosom, your soul

 

 

Reviews

[Neville]

Makes me wonder just how many lives we got left... am I your conscience by any chance....

kinda scary, dark and hairy... almost cat like, well dark anyway.... another good un... N

[Chris Shaw]

"I am the bloodiest part of you", that is a really powerful line. A dark piece of poetry. I found myself thinking, "don't be his partner in crime". Whatever you write you always draw me in Ditzy.

Chris

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Thank you Chris. I meant it in a good sense here. Like for survival. :) I am humbled and thrilled you appreciate.

[Emrys Realmskip]

Wow! I really love the word play at the ending. the flow is very nice and i like the darker theme! :)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Thank you so much for stopping by :)

[Jibey]

This is stirringly dark.. a cleverly constructed exercise in describing a wild, violent passion.. the stuff (lol) of sadism and masochism...

But I think it's just a bit of fun, really, an intellectual challenge in thinking up images of power and violence and poison.

Reaches for the cane...😛

[Fran Marie]

I feel this as a bittersweet spiteful passion which has absorbed the deepest part of you..soul mates of the darkest kind..so very well written and expressed..

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Thank you very much Fran Marie.

[Fran Marie]

You're so welcome

[Zayir]

The last few poems you have written have been, interesting. I see they come from a place of anger/resentment. I love the deep burning hatred that was presented in a almost seductive way if that makes sense. I love the passion!

Much Love

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I like being angry Zayir. It releases the creative blood in me. Thanks a lot for reviewing this. Meows.

[Suhd]

It is fatally fantastic. I like it. A new expression of love with some really unusual yet passionate images. Kudos.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Love should be kept anything but boring. Thank you Suhd. I agree.

[Agyani]

Dhara
Why would you want to nurture something so venomous? I don't think this is something like the fire you talked about in your other poem, for by fire I believe you meant the driving force, the motivation and will that pushes and urges us beyond our limits. But here the idea seems different, and the thought of treasuring viciousness is something I don't agree with.

A bull can be a bull without its horns. A real bull would charge just as ferociously even though it lost its horns. Real courage is when you put yourself on the line when you have things you don't want to lose and when you don't want to die.

In case I got the meaning all wrong, please let me know. It would help me understand poems better, and also understand you better. :)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

This is written as I search for new metaphors and imagery. Nothing meant seriously Agyani. Trying my hand at darker writing. I do love your concern and your words of wisdom. Thank you so much :)

[LazerRays]

this is intense. threatening and malicious. but its also calm which gives it that deadly "you mean business" effect. wow. just wow. remind me never to anger you. this was enjoyable!

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I wrote it mostly to try my hand at darker imagery. I really don't feel so ferocious at any times (I wish I had this kind of fire in me ;) Thank you Sarah. Glad you like.

[Wild Rose]

Power full words
I have a hand to cool my brow; Hold my hand when unsure and prepare my food when I am hungry
If I had you also by my side with your skills - urge me on to complete tasks
What a powerful team we could make

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Maybe we will be a team some time. Thank you for reviewing this little writing :)

[Wild Rose]

Think we would make a powerful team - If only ---