If You Say You Love Me

Hypothetically sentimental

Breathe me into you
Hold me in, as long as you can
Release me with love

Think of me as a wave
as lost as you, in the sea
Struggling for a shore

Keep me as a thorn
Concealed in your heart
Claiming a bit of its flesh

Don’t ever forget me
Lock me in a small iron case
But bring me out sometimes

Don’t cry much in the dark
Your sobs do have a way
of shaking me in my tomb

Author's Note

Sorry this is half-baked. Too many glitches in my brain.

Reviews

[Gee]

Many a man will tell a woman what she wants to hear just to loosen her knickers elastic....been there , done it, I'm ashamed to say.
All of us wanna be loved, I'm lucky being now extremely happily married 25 years, but for many they end up accepting second best as that is better than nowt.
Good morning Miss.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

GoodMorning Mr. Gee, 😺
I don’t really feel you should be ashamed of sowing some wild oats (so to say) before planting a golden meadow. Those who have erred are those who have truly learnt to love. (My feelings) I compliment you on such a long and fruitful. I also shed a tear for those who have as much love in their hearts but do not know how to show it. Have a nice day!

[Robert Trakofler]

It is impossible to read and know you and not love you Ditzy! But I would never put this Kitty in an iron box we all know what happens when we taket wild things into captivity... they die! The best we can do is just watch them from afar and see them shine they way they are:) and shine you do dear poetess friend! now how did I miss this one?

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

And I love and appreciate you, my dear friend for sharing and caring during this time of crisis and also being here to give us such great emotional support. Thank you my dear friend. This Kat so loves every visit of yours always.

[Robert Trakofler]

I hope you are spared from the locusts out there as if you folks need any more problems:(

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

We are a packed and crowded nation 😿 if anything, the tragedy here may be of unprecedented proportions. Please keep us in your thoughts and prayers, my friend.

[Robert Trakofler]

I know kitty i have been very worried for you:( you are in my thoughts!!!!

[LazerRays]

Ah, wow; this is sad! Its like a plea to be something to him. I expecialy liked the part about how his sobs rock your tomb. You clearly love him and even though in his prison you still comfort him. Through all the barricades he affects you. I hope youll be able to walk hand in hand with him- as he means so much. Ah, i love this one! Its 100% rodent free! ;)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Thank you Sarah. This poem is an assortment of feelings gathered over time. Some felt good enough to jot down so I presented them here. As a cat, I love and adore foremost. The rest follows. As for this guy, he’s a good sort, so I’ll haunt after I’m dead. Lol. Together, we’ll have the graveyards rocking. You in flesh and me a kitty-phantom 😹😹😹😹😹😹😹😹

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Myself.........

[Neville]

This is not half backed, this is well done.. exceedingly well done & surely my most favourite poem of your's that I have so far stopped to consider and enjoy... tis true, I tell ya.... Neville

[Perdition]

Oh stop! Not a single glitch do I see..now I do hear "Keep me as a thorn" as "Keep me lost and torn" but it is just my mind and this is your poem so ignore me. You have cut deeply into my heart with this poem . Simply said," Your job as a poet is done and done well" and I can't think of any other way to say it. If I am not completely wrecked by the end of my poetry, every poem I write, then I have failed. The value of poetry lies in the emotion for the reader and not in meter or rhyme nor entertainment, although those are factors depending on what you are writing about so you have greatly succeeded in this being about love. So..don't be so hard and don't expect more than what you are because that is where it all stems from...reality. You! Your experiences and losses and many lives I am sure and tuna on rye as well..lol. Now I have to go reply to your request because this one is just amazingly written and I love to surround myself with amazing artists/poets....so request appreciated and accepted with enthusiasm. I believe your are going to help in becoming a better poet with your writing alone, and if not...well then you're history...lol I'm so just kidding, Thank you Dhara! Yep, not saying that name if that's okay..hahha. I prefer your first name Dhara so thank you for that and thank you foryour poem Dhara~

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I’m a humble poet, who lives to write on love and all the ditzy matters of the human heart. I thrive on the inspiration from the company of my worthy poet friends, I strive to encourage them and to live up to their expectations. Thank you for accepting my request and giving me a place in your circle. I’ll try my my best to be a good friend to you. My heartfelt thanks for liking this little poem! :)

[Perdition]

 My pleasure and i get the feeling you won't have any problems living up to any expectations poetry wise and beyond ...have a great weekend and thank you for the request!..

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

You’re welcome Perdition! Have a weekend too :)

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

be close and hold me
let go gently resisting

feel me needing you
as we go our seperate ways

disavow the splitting sting
as oneness reemerges as two

repeatedly conjure
our intimate moments

not one sorrow for loss
least two bleed as one

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

A standing ovation for this superfine rendition Valormore De Plume. I’m proud my thoughts and words inspired it! For such moments I write sir.

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

How could I not be inspired? You portray the feminine side so well. Yet I sense the passion you hold back, for that is best saved for intimate moments.....

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Thank you so much!

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

Ever welcome in my whimsical world of wonders.

[angel]

The first part, I thought it was gonna be about smoking weed...which I was, so I was sort of relaxing into the idea. Then I was tossed into a heaving sea!I barely escaped with my life, given my stonish state. By the time you got done pokin' me with yer dratted thorns, I was only too happy to shove ya into a little iron box.
Yer in there now, though, arentcha Kitty? If ya feel yerself gettin' shaken, I'm not cryin'. That'll just be me...laughing...

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Lol. Because you were smoking weed, you were banished to the depths of the sea. Spluttering and spitting you emerged but kitty was ready with large pokey needle to receive you at the shore! 😹 Before you could shove me into the iron box, I made away with your sportscar and cash. Now I’m laughing all the way to the bank. A twisted plot though Angel. They sent you to rehab for addiction to salt water!

Loved your review! Thank you my dear for keeping things lively in here!

[Paul Bell]

That word, love.
Opens all sorts of doors at that moment in time.
Actually, love followed by hate. Sort of flow together.
Would you have it any other way?

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Nooo...I like bitter chocolate after a sumptuous dinner Paul. Thanks for stopping by ;)

[Paul Bell]

See if can find a shop that does bitter chocolate.

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A sentimental poem, indeed. Yet one of contrasting thoughts and emotions.

I read this as being content and happy in the throes of romance and love yet also deep within, worrying about the possibilities of this romance ending. Wanting to be breathed in, attached to the flesh forever as a thorn, kept securely locked away in the heart shaped box of a lover, are thoughts that we all have, i believe. It speaks of a strong depth to the love and an anxiety towards ever possibly losing it. Nothing is guaranteed in this life, but if the two are like waves, lost at sea, struggling for a shore as you have written, the chances of them landing ashore together is more than likely possible.

I enjoyed this poem. Simply written and constructed but infinitely heartfelt. I am sure your thorn will forever remain attached and your love treasured closely in that heart shaped box.

Nicely written, Miss Ditzy.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Good Morning dear Poet...
I'm glad you appreciate this simple poem in a simple format. It doesn't even rhyme (Felt lazy in the morning but posted it anyway)Actually, the boyfriend smiles so much it that had me kind of worried a bit. I have never seen him angry you know :) Too much happiness...too much sadness...this kind of stuff unnerves cats. They like to play safe usually. Haha. I think you read me there. Much love.

[.]

You would rather he smiled all the time than frowned. See it from that point of view.

[Chris Shaw]

Breathing in and letting go. A thorn claiming its bit of flesh. Contrasts here, but that's love for you and I feel you are talking about love here. Ditzy you are full of surprises, these lines softer by far.

Chris

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I was in a sentimental mood this morning Chris. It happens when I get too happy sometimes. Thank you very much for the precious review.

[Chris Shaw]

Too happy, sounds like an island I'd like to visit. Nice to dip your toes in some of that :)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

It's a nice place to be :)

[Chris Shaw]

Just re-read Ditzy, just as good second time round. Big hello to to you :))

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Thank my dear most friend! I missed you and am very happy to see you 💕

[Agyani]

You have a knack of portraying ideas in a delightful and charming manner, Dhara. This is quite different from your previous works which I've read (not so in-your-face and much more tender ;) ), and it has even more qualities than those pieces.

"Think of me as a wave
as lost as you, in the sea
Struggling for a shore " ......... Beautiful!

It was a bit weird that the voice can be both hurting and trapped as well as liberating and free. If it's love you are talking about then it does make sense, but if it's a person, then I'm not sure.
I wonder why you wrote it like that.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Thank you for such a thoughtful review Agyani. This poem, as I see it, is about the inevitable course of life and love. The best of them. I get sad thinking of that sometimes. This is my way of talking myself out of that pain of realisation. Kind of like preparing myself.

[Agyani]

Oh. No, no, no. Don't do that, preparing yourself for sad times!
Two reasons.
1. No amount of preparation is enough in these cases. You'll only learn more about yourself and these feelings when you go through such a phase. The pain will be there no matter how much you think you have prepared yourself, and it will hurt.
2. If you spend time preparing for pain you might experience in the future, you are appreciating the peace and happiness you currently have much less!
The way I see it, there is no inevitable course of life and love. It varies for each and every one of us, and we just have to figure out what it is for us and how we can handle, enjoy, bear, celebrate, or share it.
Be your swashbuckling self! :)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Ooooh! I love your advice Agyani! I'll remember all of it. I have my mask on. Now running off to get my sword! Many thank yous :))))