The Dance

                          I whispered in the shallowing sea

 

                     Just then the colorful waves

                     started crashing on me

 

                     My crazy limbs went up 

 

                      When I m a beautiful ballerina

 

                      They are  jewellery

 

                      Bending my neck down 

 

                      I saw the sun set

                      Gifting me a orange darkness..

 

                     My curves danced again

                     Swallowing the air rush..

                     MY hair whisked  up

                    And I whispered in the  shallowing sea

 

                    Have I ever told ?

                    How amazing it is !

 

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Reviews

[Arsh]

Well, I know, it's very weird to say but gotta say, this poetry's one of my favorites. Don't know why, may be, cause, you've written it with your aromas.. didn't ya? I'm sure, you did.

Nice flow of ink. Very stunning/breathtaking/marvelous as well as a very intriguing write.. took my heart to your "ballerina" indeed. Btw, you look quiet ..even very stunning dancing on the sand... and smiling ov`r the rock-band. Good by your lovers.

100/100!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

pleasure ! pleasure ! pleasure ! :-)) .. and ya dancing and me are in a great relationship ;) .I myself love this poem a lot .Thank u soooooooo much :)

[Arsh]

3-times pleasure? Sounds damn alcoholic by me. Well, ReD one.. keep dancing on the floor, i'm sure.. soon, you'd be loosing up your beautiful barefoot with my beats as well. Not exactly. But yeah.. you could be. Honey... I ain't wanna bother ya leaving your countless stupid reviews. So, keep writing, i'll be tickling your heart. Someday. Very soon. Until we meet, don't forget me.. but, always love me. Make me your beat and be me chick! Love ya!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Love ya too ! .Glad to have a precious friend leaving me with valuable reviews ! :)

[Simran Kewlani]

You have a very beautiful way of writing. I love them. The poetic devices used are amazing. Keep it up. I hope you do something about these. They are too good to be hidden from this world, darling. Find a publisher and get them published. xx

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poem. I have danced often the sea. The oceans had the perfect music for freedom and peace. I like the places and the positive feel of your words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Lenah Mehzabin]

The
oceans had the perfect music for freedom and peace
...Exactly !

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes it does. I lived on both coastlines. Now I live in Michigan. You always miss the ocean.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Wow how stunning some of my
favorite things the ocean sea dancing swimming.



My great grandmother was a Ballerina I am the
spiting image of her we look alike she was a stunning woman.



You described a beautiful dancer such a Elegant and stunning piece
and you described her movements dancers are sways and movement
and you described it with the movements of the Ocean waves Dancing.



I have written Many pieces on dancing it is a sunning
and graceful lovely art how the body moves in movements
as a dancer does.


Thank you for sharing such a sunning piece and
for stopping by my page.



God bless. Benita

[Lenah Mehzabin]

hey really u and ur grandmother were ballerina ? oW and ya i wanted to be one too :( but sad that i m not for some reasons but i love dancing and sea is something turns me up so i made this poem ..thank You so much for such a nice review ! :)

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

I Never got to be a ballerina but I love dancing because of her Graceful on my feet and my grandpa said I look just like her she was his mother full blooded Irish I have always loved to dance the passion is there it maybe because my Great grandma was a Ballerina :) my mom said I danced and danced a lot when I was a little girl I loved dancing I love it as much as writing I can send you one or 2 links of some of the dancing poems if you'd like to read them too many to count but if you'd like to read some they may inspire you :) Take care. Benita

[Lenah Mehzabin]

i love dancing too it's another half of my heart nd i think u must be a very good dancer and yes i would love to get the links i like poems related to dance ! :)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

i will be happy if u mail me those links .Thank you Benita :)

[Afraa]

What an image I got in my head! Spectacular job!

Looking forward to reading more of your pieces.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much ! i m really glad that u liked it :)

[vineyard]

hey,nice one!
Imagery is really good.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you ! .. i m happy dat u liked it :)