Beguiled In Mirage

 

Grafting the prints of one night

Suffocated mind

With soft dim of moonlit

Between them - the two hills

She was floating quite      

Un- darkened princess

She licked them both

One named “Gem “owned gems

One named” Pebble” of harsh games

Differences so clear

 In naked eye

 Yet.. after decades of awning

The question of “Tale”

Surrounds our mind

Why her waves welted  pebble,

Burnt in fire - one that only stone makes

Why she chose rough surface, where river dries

Over Gems  - Who screamed her name 

Reviews

[Reeti]

Very imaginative and evocative. The writer (you) has made usage of a few words to poetically underline the division between want and lack affected by choices. What is most impressive about this verse is the depiction of imagery to elicit the visions of the "suffocated mind".

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much !! .I'm happy that you liked it and i'm really sorry for late reply

[Reeti]

oh... i'm sorry too for seeing this message late. =P

[Ana B.]

Very beautifula and unique. Loved the title very much :)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much ! I'm glad u liked it :)

[Tasfia Islam]

enjoyed reading this.... thank you... :)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Oh it's really sweet of u .Glad u liked it : ))

[A Ghost of Myself]

One named “Gem “owned gems

One named” Pebble” of harsh games

(quotations need some adjustments.)

I see an transfusion in you words, the battlement of mixtures if you will. It seems to speak of origins, “The question of Tales.” But then reflects as your title suggest a mirage. Are we looking at two separate beings envying the others traits, hoping to mesh perfection into one entity? The burnt in fire, suggest they're melted together, becoming whole, a mixture of qualities.

There is a chance I'm reading into it, as I often do, in which case disregard; but I found it to be an enjoyable read, and displays your skill and a ever growing talent.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Well thank you so much for your words.I really appreciate .And about the poem > There is a story hidden inside it if u see deeply. It's about a love story . The river that was floating between the two hills " Gem and Pebble" are actually indicating two person ( male lovers) and she herself was a ( female) . So here When gem was true and really loved her she never saw it and instead chose "pebble" who was a player .He broke her heart and she died in pain again Gem died because he never got his love .He waited and called her but she never came . So she was kinda trapped in the mirage created by pebble .

( So this was the main theme of the poem)
Thanks again . : )

[Saddam]

Your writing have such a beauty that reader connects till the end. beautiful write dear, great work done.

The question of “Tale”
Surrounds our mind
Why her waves welted pebble,

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank u so for such an honor .I'm so glad u liked it and enjoyed my poems : )

[7ofspades]

I like how you made the connection between human nature and nature (no pun intended) thanks for sharing your poem and the meaning behind it--i always love hearing about the author's original message

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Glad u liked it : )