Crippled Leaves

Left barren to their fate,

On the bumpy asphalt street,

The dry brown leaves,

Who once were ivory green.

They drag on Autumn's plight,

Injured, miffed and hurt.

Crawling their way smoothly,

With their intricate attire.

They jump, they fly,

Quietly with the slashing wind

And juggle distant distances,

On their impaired body,

Meeting their mates on the way,

They celebrate a quick party.

And share Innocent tears,

Talking in their ever propensity,

Carrying their predestined steps,

They keep walking till their near end.

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think about this. I really need to know how it is.
Thank you.

Reviews

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

We're a bit like autumn leaves, aren't we? We are only here for a season, flitting apparitions upon gusts of life...then the wind dies down, and winter comes, and everything is cold.
Thanks for sharing! :)

[Damien Davison]

I really like this poem, especially right now when all i hear is the leaves running around aimlessly. Good job!

[Chris]

I liked the way your thoughts worked together to express your insight.

[Bourbon Key]

Getting old is a b***h. I like it. I find you revert to common themes/images of colors/seasons metaphors of vegetation and us humans. I like it though.

[Barbara Walker]

You've taken something as simple as a leaf and turned it into so much more. Shows great creativity. I am not sure of the third line from the end, that confused me a bit. All in all a great write!

[Fréyjä Helv..]

The common walks of life... First day we are blooming, the next we just wither away.... Nice job...

[B-poet]

Very well penned. You've illustrated the essence of the physical and seasonal changes that happen with leaves in general. Plus adding a little characterization within your poem has given it a distinctive voice and personality of its own. Great job. :)

[Craba]

This is a really good write, enjoyed

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

Good poem and when now i see a few leafs fluttering in the wind I will think of the great party they are having. Why wasnt I invited!!

[Coyote Poetry]

i enjoyed the poem. The strong statements gave life to the photo. I like the Fall. Seemed the world slowed down and we can enjoy the cooler days and nights. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Redrascalstrawberry]

Thank you so much.