In Such Dreams ⁓ (sensual)

Eights 'n Sixes

You stood right here before me, Dear …

shone with the brightest glow,

I was aware that everywhere

our world began to slow.

This timeless space became your grace …

it was right then I knew;

life sparkled fine, like ancient wine,

each sip a taste of You.

Lips softly meet, such flavors sweet,

the universe our world …

in every place I saw your face,

my senses all unfurled.

You smelled of spice, like paradise …

when we touched, hot sparks flew;

’twas then we kissed, a gentle mist

of stardust’s golden hue

fell all around … there was no sound,

except your tender sighs.

You took my hand, then bade me stand,

looked deep into my eyes:

A gentle stroke, each word you spoke,

calmed down my every fear …

with much in-store, I wanted more,

down your cheek rolled a tear.

With care I asked, “Has sorrow passed?”

You smiled and touched my face;

“No, my sweet man, love has began,”

took me in warm embrace,

“as passions grow, my rivers flow,

alluring you to me;

aching pure bliss, I crave your kiss …

yearn our sweet ecstasy.”

Your hem lifted, I was gifted

when you laid softly down.

The spell then broke when I awoke,

“Ahhh, in such dreams I’d drown.”

Richard W. Jenkins

©2015

Author's Note

Eights 'n Sixes
Original form created by
Richard W. Jenkins
© 1 Apr 1987

Any number of 4-line verses about anything:
Aligned left or centered.

Syllable count per verse:
8/6/8/6

Rhyme scheme:
xxxaxxxa
xxxxxb
xxxcxxxc
xxxxxb

xxxdxxxd
xxxxxe
xxxfxxxf
xxxxxe

Etc...

Picture/image, from Wikimedia Commons.

I gladly welcome constructive critique! : )

Reviews

[dr ak]

This poem has put spellbound on me. This poem is the epitome of passion,infinite love, intensity and deep emotions. The way you put life in the words makes my soul lively and mesmerized. This is the best poem i have come across in a while. Keep it up. You are one hell of perfect poet, no doubt about it 😊

[Richard🖌]

Hi-ya, Doc! : )
What a pleasure and honor to receive such a banner review for a first read of my poems.
I hope you'll enjoy any others as much as you seem to have this one.

Thank you for the expressed appreciation, enjoyment, and praise … blessings! ⁓ Richard

[Gracey_Moon]

This poem is beautiful! There so much love an emotion put into it! This is the best poem i have seen on here so far!!

[Richard🖌]

I've fallen so far behind,

After my teaching retirement, being offline for so long, and not commenting on reviews, I'm making a quick thank you with a very grateful acknowledgment to everyone for their wonderful input and feedback.

With big smiles 'n happy hugs! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Sarah K Cass]

Well, have we not all had sweet dreams like that!? Really liked this and the rhyming. Surprised me at the end and made me smile xx

[Richard🖌]

Gotcha, eh? ; )
I think what you say must be true, Sarah, for it seems so many relate to this rather warm suite of stirring verses.
Glad you found favor in the rhyme scheme … it is easy, and whatever one composes in this form cannot help but flow smooth as silk. I'd love it if you tried it.

Thank you< Sarah Dear, for your lovely reviews today … you've made me smile, too! ⁓ Richard 🍂

[Ardra]

You smelled of spice, like paradise …
when we touched, hot sparks flew;
’twas then we kissed, a gentle mist
of stardust’s golden hue
With care I asked, “Has sorrow passed?”
You smiled and touched my face;
“No, my sweet man, love has began,”
took me in warm embrace,

Such tender love .... :)
Loved the feel of it. ...each word filling the sense with a calmness

[Richard&#128396;]

Truly, Dear Ria,
It is a wonderful pleasure to have my poetry sought out deep in their portfolio, to be read and reviewed by so accomplished a poetess as yourself.
The two verses you've selected stand at the very heartbeat of this composition, and happen to be among my very favorites, telling me we've connected on a meaningful and harmonious level.
What more could a bard hope and wish for … that you felt and loved it in your calm places is a caress unto my soul.
Bless you, Dear Poetess … warmest hugs! ⁓ Richard

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"You smelled of spice, like paradise …
when we touched, hot sparks flew;
’twas then we kissed, a gentle mist
of stardust’s golden hue"

Wow, wow, wow! I loved the flow in this one!! This was more romantic than sensual though ;)
I loved the format too. Sounds like something I should try next :)
Reading your words cast a spell binding effect on me, Richard. A beautiful write :)

[Richard&#128396;]

Thank you, Yumna! : )
What a sweet verse you've highlighted … one that speaks in sparks of poetic voice.
I am thrilled you favor this piece so enthusiastically, and look forward to reading your version of it, with my honored and humble blessing! ⁓ Richard

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes, I'm thinking on working on this next 😊😊
You're most welcome, Richard! Always a pleasure 😊

[Susan 🦋]

Richard!..omgoodness!! Talk about being under a spell! Well, this one does it! couldn't wait to read to the end...then the end comes...and I want more! Just don't want the feeling and words to end. Richard love your ability to transition between stanzas ( I struggle with this)
is so very smooth and flows from one to the next..love this. ( teach me :-) Your poems come alive, I am transported into another...conversation? dream? Heck it feel sooo persona!...Like I just invaded someone private thoughts!..but ahhhhhh this one! A dream?...why must they always be a dream! :-)

[Richard&#128396;]

Thank you warmly and exuberantly, Susan!
If there is anything single thing over another I truly adore bout your reviews, it's that I can feel your spirit dancing up off the page to flow all through me … as if I'm being caressed from the inside -out, if that makes any sense.
Whatever, I love the sensation, and I am ever-so grateful for it … warmest hugs to you! ⁓ Richard : )

[tracey]

fantastic piece yet again really enjoyed reading,one of the best writers

[Richard&#128396;]

Thank you, Tracey, ever-so humbly and gratefully.
I bow with great humility in the bright glow of your praise and enjoyment of my earnest labors.

Many joy-fulled blessings to you! ⁓ Richard ; )

[J. J. Nightingale]

Wow...and hummm......................... ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh


Jazz..:)

[Richard&#128396;]

Thank you so very warmly, Jasmine, for selecting this piece to read and comment on … it seems you enjoyed it, much to my grateful pleasure.
I have sincerely enjoyed your company! ⁓ Richard

[J. J. Nightingale]

I did enjoy your words, so much so... that I had no words to give.... :)

[Richard&#128396;]

Sweetly spoken, Dear Poetess … I read between your lines. ; )

[J. J. Nightingale]

HA ! ............................... :)....

[Richard&#128396;]

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[barleygirl]

Another beautifully-crafted & long-flowing message about love & lovemaking, stated in many of the familiar phrases that some cling to, as they would cling to an old established relationship that lasts thru time. I don't mean to dismiss your style, we're just different, that's all. Yours is very well done in your preferred tried & true expressions of love.

[Richard&#128396;]

Thank you ever-so much for your time taken to read and comment on this ernest effort to compose and please my fellow poets and poetesses as best I may, and I love the praise, of course, as-well, for pointing out how different we are from each other.
I, suppose, this is one of the most important aspects of humanity … otherwise, we would have scant uniqueness to share, appreciate, and learn from one another.
I realize not everyone is going to enjoy my efforts equally, and for whatever amount you have, I am sincerely more grateful than I've words to convey.
There are other genre of poetry on here from my pen you might better take a cotton to, than those of love and romance, if you'v a mind to check any of them out.
You've put the sunshine in my day and a smile across my rugged mug — thank you so warmly and gratefully, Dear Lady-Poet … happy hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

BTW: I love your Profile pic. : )

[R.M.C]

A lovely, sensual and very alluring poem Richard. Your way of painting with words is certainly unique and very effective at creating a picture but also a certain flow and feeling to go with the story. Though I may be wrong - people have pointed my mistakes out on a few of my pieces - but the third to last line is five syllables isn't it?

[Richard&#128396;]

Thank you, Ross!
How sincerely appreciated your words of praise, enjoyment, and understanding gratify my humble efforts, and how very thoughtful of you to help me out with that missing rogue syllable, too.
It is the kind of attention that let's me know my work is actually read and paid attention to … all made right now. : )
Thank you again, My Friend.
May your day be as blessed as you've made mine! ⁓ Richard

[R.M.C]

You're very welcome; it's a pleasure to read your work.

[annalysiar]

Its beautiful well painted

[Richard&#128396;]

Thanks … !