A Peaceful Hush (her morning)

A Peaceful Hush (her morning)

A Poem by Richard
"

Mollietta

"



A Peaceful Hush

Through sheer lace curtains
 sunlight greets her eyes,
 to early dove song’s
 cooing calls to rise.

A stretch, or two,
 the shutters then thrown wide ...
 life’s splend'rous wonders
 on display outside.

Lies morning dew’s brocade
 spread 'cross the lawn ...
 caught in each drop
 glints sunbeams'
 spark'ling dawn.

Rise steamy mists,
 in ghostly arabesques ...
 stand floral colours,
 tall and statuesque.

Wends warmly through …
 a gentle breeze’s brush,
 whilst all around takes on
  … a peaceful hush.


Richard W. Jenkins
 ©2015





"1st Place Winner"

in

The Blue Rose Challenge


© 2016 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
"Mollietta"
An original form created by Mollie Reckitt, from Ely, Cambridgeshire, United Kingdom, in 2013.
Rules:
No limit to number of verses, with a five verse minimum, each verse has twenty-syllables in any configuration, rhyming is author's choice.

Picture, compliments of Wikimedia Commons.

Constructive critique is always welcome! : )

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I love reading your poetry and then learning about the structure you used, which I always sense in the background, but does not overtake the beauty or flow of the words. This is a visual delight, and I see everything described, hear and feel nature awakening my senses as if I am in that front yard. I am so swept into that experience, I no longer notice there is a person there also seeing all this through her window, and at some moment I wonder what she is thinking when she looks out- I don't remember what called me back to her. I have several whimsical thoughts- an answering poem- like call and response, you know, of the man standing in his front yard, also experiencing the morning and then catching sight of her. Or of her night, when she closes the shutters after taking in the hush that falls late in the evening, after everyone has fallen asleep. I guess I want to hear more of this place, or her, like you want to know the story behind a beautiful and mesmerizing painting. Thank you so much for that morning, ss I sit here in my morning, waking up.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

So, you selected this one to review instead of the clouds 'n river piece, eh? : )

Ah.. read more
Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

I did a short review of "Clouds. . ." - it was when I was trying desperately not to go on and on . ... read more



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Ohhhh this is how I feel when I'm in my garden in the early morning!That peaceful hush when everything is baptized in the morning dew!..lovely!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

The "form" is listed under the title, as they are in all my poems, and the rules are in the Author's.. read more
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Richard

3 Months Ago

Well, you know a good bit, and that's a good thing, eh? : )
I really have no words for this!
-Breathtaking
-Magical
-Beautifully syntaxed
I like the "arabesque".
Mesmerising morning!
Of course, this is one of a kind and award winning.




Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Thank you ever-so warmly and gratefully, Dear Tazeen, for the loveliness and appreciatively warm tou.. read more
Tazeen Ahmed

3 Months Ago

You're welcome greatly!:)
Have you noticed that you sometimes spell words the British way? Colours instead of colors, grey instead of gray, and I've seen you rhyme "again" with "pain," meaning you're pronouncing "again" the British way. Is there a reason? Just curious. :)



Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Green_Shoes

3 Months Ago

Part of your message has disappeared, unfortunately. It's interesting to discuss why people share th.. read more
Richard

3 Months Ago

Yeah, the site does that sometimes … an unfortunate glitch, but it seems enough came through.
Richard

3 Months Ago

I once wrote a blog about why many share writings on poetry sites, and would be glad to share it wit.. read more
a beautifully crafted piece Richard, good to enter into the present moment with the help of the "hush" again a very well chosen image that seems to compliment the piece so very well

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

Prynhawn da (Good afternoon), George! : )
Morning here, and what a great to begin it, with on.. read more
George Coombs

5 Months Ago

Your welcome Richard, its good to be in touch
This is a very compelling piece, and it created a very vivid picture in my mind. I enjoyed it and can honestly offer no critique :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Dear Hyacinth! : )

Your presence and beautifully expressed words of praise.. read more
I love reading your poetry and then learning about the structure you used, which I always sense in the background, but does not overtake the beauty or flow of the words. This is a visual delight, and I see everything described, hear and feel nature awakening my senses as if I am in that front yard. I am so swept into that experience, I no longer notice there is a person there also seeing all this through her window, and at some moment I wonder what she is thinking when she looks out- I don't remember what called me back to her. I have several whimsical thoughts- an answering poem- like call and response, you know, of the man standing in his front yard, also experiencing the morning and then catching sight of her. Or of her night, when she closes the shutters after taking in the hush that falls late in the evening, after everyone has fallen asleep. I guess I want to hear more of this place, or her, like you want to know the story behind a beautiful and mesmerizing painting. Thank you so much for that morning, ss I sit here in my morning, waking up.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

So, you selected this one to review instead of the clouds 'n river piece, eh? : )

Ah.. read more
Marianne Rose

1 Year Ago

I did a short review of "Clouds. . ." - it was when I was trying desperately not to go on and on . ... read more
You know, it surprises me just how big an impact font can make on a reader. Normally, the words themselves would have to set the tone, etc etc. With every poem of yours I've read, the font (and accompaniment art) sets the stage and casts a gentle, romantic light on things. Then you, instead of using the font as a crutch, seem to use the already-set ambiance as a stepping-off point. You use your words to carry the reader through the poem like a leaf caught in a gentle summer's breeze.

Having said all that, the font doesn't take away from the words themselves, which can stand completely on their own.

One thing I like about your poems is that they aren't the typical perfectly-structured-flawlessly-rhymed love poems. Rather, they speak in romantic terms and simply set the tone for a romantic setting. There is enough mystique to make the minds of the readers work and think of their own happy places.

Posted 1 Year Ago


I wish half my mornings like this beautiful imagery dear just beautiful

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thanks, Raylene!
Your wishes and praise are always welcome … blessings! ⁓ Richard
Raylene

1 Year Ago

Thank you Richard
Beautiful writing, truly inspiring.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Gee, thanks for the kudos!
Welcome to the site! ⁓ Richard
Beautiful writing, I'm inspired. It was a visual feast.

Blessings

El

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Yee-doggies!

I get two reviews from you today … even the sun outside is smiling bri.. read more

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