Beside the pond ⁓ (wistful)

Beside the pond ⁓ (wistful)

A Poem by Richard 🍃
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      Beside the pond ~


          Alone,

          I sat beside the pond

          this morning.


          Early sun ...

          vibrant in its warm flush

          of golden welcome

          came cascading down

          from treetops' glow,

          embracing grass,

          gifting colors vividly alive,

          lifting flowers' faces …

          with their honey-pollened smiles.


          I was amazed

          at how the breeze knew

          I missed you

          or was even thinking of you,

          but I’d swear

          it touched mine with your cheek,

          slid a wisp of your locks

          across my shoulder,

          and became the sweetness

          of your breath.

 

          Olive oil and rose bouquet ...


          ... it hung for awhile

          in the morning air,

          a fragrant marker

          along a trail of yesterdays,

          leading to You ...

          places of dreams and hope,

          of love and laughter

          and impossible possibilities.

 

          I almost started to believe

          I’d turn my head ~

          and you’d be there.


          Each year

          has come and gone …

          You, like fertile mana

          ever glowing, growing

          in my heart.


          It’s said all things end,

          and walking back to the house

          I sensed that coming truth,

          as Autumn's leaves

          began falling

          like tears ~

          washing around

          my feet.




                  Richard W. Jenkins

                        ©2015





1st Place

"Poetry About Loss Contest"

© 2020 Richard 🍃


Author's Note

Richard 🍃
Picture is courtesy of Wikimedia Commons.
Constructive criticism is always welcomed and appreciated. : )

I was asked to post a Free Verse for a change; so, here one is … hope you enjoy.

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I loved the gentle imagery that you created, that ended with a poignancy indicated by the falling leaves.
Although not normally a writer ( or lover) of free verse, I felt that this worked particularly well. You may have helped to change my inhibited views. Thank you.

Posted 4 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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Richard 🍃

6 Months Ago

For those who might wonder:
The six deletions above were controversial comments from a wrongl.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

3 Months Ago

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I love the change and imagery in the last stanza. You start the poem with sunrise and growing and spring in the air and end it with an onset of autumn. A younger man would get hung up on the spring but one who's seen some seasons knows that fall will come. This poem shows not only your skill with words but your wisdom. I know it was a good write because it made me feel something

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Month Ago

Thank you most gratefully, Dear Syr TS 🥂

Every once in a great while, a knowing po.. read more
For a special someone.. I believe.. The way you described everything it was just soo amazing.. THE IMPOSSIBLE POSSIBILITIES I feel everytime you sit and even scribble, you weave something good and as beautiful as ever. Hope you someday gonna teach me to write like this, dear Ric.
Love, Ankita

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Month Ago

Thank you ever-so sincerely, Dear Ankita 🍁

There is such depth and feeling radiati.. read more
A wistful morning indeed! I could feel the wispy breeze and the deep longing turning leaves into tear drops. Brilliant write Richard--took me to the many times I set alone by the pond missing my loved ones.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Months Ago

Mornin', Kira 🌼

I, somehow, knew you would find yourself in this piece, if/when yo.. read more
Kira Fulks

2 Days Ago

This was of the very first poem I read when I joined the group...I love it as I did the first time.... read more
This poem is so beautiful. Your words brought tears to my eyes. Your word flows so easily, giving the reader the feeling of the wind that you write about.
My favorite lines:
"I was amazed
at how the breeze knew
I missed you
or was even thinking of you,
but I’d swear
it touched mine with your cheek,"

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Months Ago

Goodness, Sandra Dear! 😉

How I was able to miss your beautiful review, I have no i.. read more
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Rye
as Autumn's leaves
began falling
like tears ~
washing around
my feet.

love the imagery here and the symbolism here, amazing write

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

3 Months Ago

Ahhh, Dear Lady Ryanna 🎭

It seems forever since we last touched and I heard the ap.. read more
Rye

3 Months Ago

well i should be around for a while. I have writing to do and thinking...
as Autumn's leaves
began falling
like tears ~
washing around
my feet.

Love these lines here, This is so wonderful, I don't know forms too well, I think this is free verse.
Awesome write

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

4 Months Ago

Dear Kay-T 🍂

You have come upon one of my most endearing poems, and how correct y.. read more
I love your use of the word (the healing power) of Mana - one I have not heard others use thus far - her memories will always bring you to that place of healing just as the beautiful scenery you described would bring visual healing (thanks to the beauty of nature) This was pure healing from beginning to end and a pleasure to read Richard :)

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

6 Months Ago

Um, Carolynn 🍂

What more could an humble bard wish for than the mention of "love" .. read more
Carolynn

6 Months Ago

Your response has truly made me smile :)) Interesting that "Manna" in the bible was spiritual nouris.. read more
Richard 🍃

6 Months Ago

The ancient word "mana" may well have been used before Biblical Times, Carolynn. From research, the .. read more
sentimentally beautiful ,
love your use of imagery , a captivating piece with a very gentle tone throughout, a sincere and heartfelt poem .
Beautiful poem


Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

6 Months Ago

Ahhh, M'Lady Katrina 🥀

Your words are as a scintillating caress upon a bard's hope.. read more
Such gorgeous imagery! I was easily placed into your scene & think your writing is very beautiful.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

6 Months Ago

Thank you ever-so warmly, Lady Jennifer 🌾

The sweet touch of your lovely review em.. read more
Beautiful metaphors of dawn; descriptive words of nature; the sun, the breeze; then memories of a loved one gone; so vivid; it flowed like a water passing over a rock. Just loved it.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

8 Months Ago

Hi, Lady Betty✨

In an economy of words, you've conveyed more in warmth, appreciatio.. read more
Betty Hermelee

8 Months Ago

I told you I love your poetry, and your critiques on mine, truly yours, Betty

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