Old Love (second thoughts)

Old Love (second thoughts)

A Poem by Richard 🍃
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Ballad in alternating iambic tetrameter/trimeter (8/6/8/6 counts) and abcb, defe, ghih, etc; rhyme scheme.

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It’s well I know of lonely nights …

these ever longer days.

Each time my lover's strayed-away

and I'm the one who stays.


Lost rivers from my many tears …

then, flowed to sorrow's seas,

with plaintive, soft-sent sighs to thee,

beseeching on bare knees.


Too well I know that painful grip

of steady, lonesome days,

and dread the fall of eventide,

devoid of your dear ways.


Comes ever to my waiting hope,

unanswered, echoed calls …

there's no relent to this dire need;

too sad, each tear that falls.


Shhh! Listen, hear this heart of mine

sing sweet our love's refrain …

oh, do your feet begin to dance,

or does it bring you pain,


to know that stars cannot take back

what's twinkled in our eyes …

nor, moon forget that which he's seen

on high from warm night skies?


If you shall answer with a, "Yes,

my soul is lonely, too!"

Why not then give us one more chance,

to make old love brand new.



Richard W. Jenkins

©2019

© 2021 Richard 🍃


Author's Note

Richard 🍃
Painting: Oil on board, courtesy of Pinterest.

Please, feel free to leave hard critique, but know what you talking about. : )

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Oh my, your words are so relatable and the last two lines “Give us one more Chance to make Old Love Brand New just melts my heart.
Richard, thanks so much for sharing your special words and Beautiful Romantic Heart with us. Can you tell that I loved this one?
Take care & I pray that you are well & having a wonderful Holiday. Warm hugs & Blessings dear Master Poet. Mj😇

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Thank you ever-so warmly, Mary Jo 🍂
Yes, it's true that so many will, probably, relate to .. read more



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I love this poem. Well said and felt. The heartbreaking and so willing to do it all over again. These are the words of a romantic, masterful poet. Thank you for sharing this. I found it to be a heart-warming experience.

Posted 3 Days Ago


This is certainly a dear poem with many relatable
Words. The moment I finally gave up on lovers lost I found a greater inner peace. Old loves lost was so important to me, but even then I failed at making them a new. So now in my senior years I chose peace for myself rather then hoping to fix my past lost loves.
Great poem but I hope you find peace and happiness with yourself.

Posted 6 Days Ago


Lost rivers from my many tears …
then, flowed to sorrow's seas,

Love the metaphor here, from sea's to tears...aww both in water form.
Sorrow seas, to be quite lonely to drift on...
Awesome writing


Posted 1 Week Ago


who would criticize such a perfect write, you write so well. I really like and enjoy rhyming poems.

Posted 2 Months Ago


A lovely, lonely technically stellar lyrical write. I’m not qualified to give a hard critique anyway, but this has that vintage vibe to it which I find so appealing. It is romantic and gentle and it’s poetic soul is right here Shhh! Listen, hear this heart of mine
sing sweet our love's refrain …
oh, do your feet begin to dance,
or does it bring you pain,

to know that stars cannot take back
what's twinkled in our eyes …
nor, moon forget that which he's seen
on high from warm night skies?

Posted 2 Months Ago


to know that stars cannot take back

what's twinkled in our eyes …

nor, moon forget that which he's seen

on high from warm night skies?


Such bliss in this so well tendered. bravo

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tate Morgan

2 Months Ago

Thank you Richard. You are a true talent.
Richard 🍃

2 Months Ago

B l u s h *
Tate Morgan

2 Months Ago

This took a lot of work. Precise drafting. Command of language and insight. I see every turn of a ph.. read more
First I need to tell you how much I love your choice in cover pics for your poems. Very nice.
Next I really like the poem as a whole but I have to say the part that reads "to know that stars cannot take back what's twinkled in our eyes...nor, moon forget that which he's seen on high from warm night skies?". That is my favorite part. Still spoken in a romantic sense. Also, I hope you don't mind me saying this, but it would make a nice companion piece to my twilght poem : )
Enjoying your poems sir : )



Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Months Ago

Thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Poetess 🎶

It is a special treat, indeed, that my ef.. read more
Beautiful written i feel like often we forgot that we can run out of love but it is never late to start love again. Love is a feeling worth fighting and renews.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Months Ago

A most lovely review, Dear Poetess 🥀

Thank you ever-so warmly for your encouraging.. read more
I absolutely love this.

I have little knowledge of the technicalities of poetry but I do feel like this arrangement lends itself so well to the bitter sweet.

I think this is beautiful in content and composition.

Elle xx

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Months Ago

Hi, Elle 🍂

How wonderful it truly is to write for and share with another who can ".. read more
Too well I know that painful grip
of steady, lonesome days,
and dread the fall of eventide,
devoid of your dear ways.

I really love this part, i can feel the emotion in this stanza,
this is a well written write, much enjoyed this emotional piece

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

3 Months Ago

Hi, Kim ☀️

Thank you so very much for selecting this romantic piece in homage to .. read more

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Last Updated on January 11, 2021
Tags: Loneliness, Romance, Tenderness, Hope, Promise

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