Old Love (second thoughts)

Old Love (second thoughts)

A Poem by Richard🍃
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Ballad in alternating iambic tetrameter/trimeter (8/6/8/6 counts) and abcb, defe, ghih, etc; rhyme scheme.

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It’s well I know of lonely nights …

these ever longer days.

Each time my lover's strayed-away

and I'm the one who stays.


Lost rivers from my many tears …

then, flowed to sorrow's seas,

with plaintive, soft-sent sighs to thee,

beseeching on bare knees.


Too well I know that painful grip

of steady, lonesome days,

and dread the fall of eventide,

devoid of your dear ways.


Comes ever to my waiting hope,

unanswered, echoed calls …

there's no relent to this dire need;

too sad, each tear that falls.


Shhh! Listen, hear this heart of mine

sing sweet our love's refrain …

oh, do your feet begin to dance,

or does it bring you pain,


to know that stars cannot take back

what's twinkled in our eyes …

nor, moon forget that which he's seen

on high from warm night skies?


If you shall answer with a, "Yes,

my soul is lonely, too!"

Why not then give us one more chance,

to make old love brand new.



Richard W. Jenkins

©2019

© 2021 Richard🍃


Author's Note

Richard🍃
Painting: Oil on board, courtesy of Pinterest.

Please, feel free to leave hard critique, but know what you're talking about. 🤔

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to know that stars cannot take back
what's twinkled in our eyes …
nor, moon forget that which he's seen
on high from warm night skies?

Maybe but it sure can dim the light in someone's eyes, sometimes be blinded by that light as well.
Love takes two, when one decides not to love anymore it dulls that shine for one half of that party.
This is a since heart warming write though.....

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🍃

1 Month Ago

Oh-yes, Dear Kay 🥀

I so deeply understand your sentiments and completely agree, as.. read more



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to know that stars cannot take back
what's twinkled in our eyes …
nor, moon forget that which he's seen
on high from warm night skies?

Maybe but it sure can dim the light in someone's eyes, sometimes be blinded by that light as well.
Love takes two, when one decides not to love anymore it dulls that shine for one half of that party.
This is a since heart warming write though.....

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🍃

1 Month Ago

Oh-yes, Dear Kay 🥀

I so deeply understand your sentiments and completely agree, as.. read more
Such a wonderful and beautiful write. This is lovely.
Your writes flow so naturally and they are touching.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🍃

1 Month Ago

Such tenderly warming words, Dear Katzie✨

How can a grateful bard help but feel a b.. read more
To me, this has the sense of someone writing about their own passage through time. A charting if you like, of those moments that come to us throughout life, of opportunities lost, or perhaps not recognised before the page turns and it becomes too late to turn back the clock. It has a slightly melancholic feel, but is utterly charming and lyrical and reads effortlessly.

Classic poetry at its best.

Beccy.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🍃

2 Months Ago

Beccy🍂

Such a lovely surprise it is finding your always appreciated, highly-regard.. read more
"Lost rivers from my many tears …then, flowed to sorrow's seas"
I truly like the way this piece starts with so much pain, knowing one's sorrows and loneliness, but what we all need in life is love, companionship and honest relations. And that's what it ends with. I really dig this poem Richard. Great work, amazing lines, connecting emotions.
Regards,
Anu

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🍃

2 Months Ago

Ahhh, Dear Anu 🌾

There nothing quite exciting and warmly gratifying than receiving.. read more
Anuja Sharma

2 Months Ago

You're most welcome Richard. It really feels so connecting when you encounter such beautifully writt.. read more
Richard🍃

1 Month Ago

Anu,
You've a, umm, warmly delightful way of "connecting." ; )
Ohhhhhh thank you, thank you thank you, this was a truly wonderful read! My heart dances, great counts.


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🍃

2 Months Ago

Mm, how wonderful is that?
Alex is the name of my cat!
Now, here you come along,
.. read more
Richard!! You are a TRUE POET. The lines flow perfectly, with a specific number of words per stanza. Something about that not only makes the poem sound “more poetic” but also improves its appearance. This poem gave me feelings of longing, a break up, wanting somebody back… trying to revive the love and allow the pain to subside. It’s hard… reminded me of my ex. It would be nice to make all the bad go away, wouldnt it? Another great piece from you… not surprised.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🍃

3 Months Ago

Yes, Lovely Marina🥂

It would, indeed, be so wondrously enthralling if we had but t.. read more
A work of art, my favorite lines:
to know that stars cannot take back

what's twinkled in our eyes …

nor, moon forget that which he's seen

on high from warm night skies?

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🍃

3 Months Ago

Hi, Dear Shelley 🥂

Oh, what a wonderfully inspiring and gratifying compliment you'.. read more
Such a beautiful and haunting poem. I love the “old English” words and the composition!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🍃

4 Months Ago

Ohhh, Suzanne🍷

I'd walk a mile for your love of anything I've written, and your wa.. read more
Too well I know that painful grip
of steady, lonesome days,
and dread the fall of eventide,
devoid of your dear ways.

Gosh Richard, I can really feel your words here "Too well I know that painful grip"
I do a lot these days. This is wonderful as well as filled with beauty as well.
emotionally filled and beautiful at the same time. Nicely written.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🍃

6 Months Ago

Dear Kerra 🌼

Such a lovely review you blessed me with … it's how you've expresse.. read more

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Added on July 4, 2019
Last Updated on August 1, 2021
Tags: Loneliness, Romance, Tenderness, Hope, Promise

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LLanfair, Gwynedd, Wales



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