Old Love (second thoughts)

Old Love (second thoughts)

A Poem by Richard 🍃
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Ballad in alternating iambic tetrameter/trimeter (8/6/8/6 counts) and abcb, defe, ghih, etc; rhyme scheme.

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It’s well I know of lonely nights …

these ever longer days.

Each time my lover's strayed-away

and I'm the one who stays.


Lost rivers from my many tears …

then, flowed to sorrow's seas,

with plaintive, soft-sent sighs to thee,

beseeching on bare knees.


Too well I know that painful grip

of steady, lonesome days,

and dread the fall of eventide,

devoid of your dear ways.


Comes ever to my waiting hope,

unanswered, echoed calls …

there's no relent to this dire need;

too sad, each tear that falls.


Shhh! Listen, hear this heart of mine

sing sweet our love's refrain …

oh, do your feet begin to dance,

or does it bring you pain,


to know that stars cannot take back

what's twinkled in our eyes …

nor, moon forget that which he's seen

on high from warm night skies?


If you shall answer with a, "Yes,

my soul is lonely, too!"

Why not then give us one more chance,

to make old love brand new.



Richard W. Jenkins

©2019

© 2019 Richard 🍃


Author's Note

Richard 🍃
Painting: Oil on board, courtesy of Pinterest.

Please, feel free to leave hard critique, but know what you talking about. : )

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Oh my, your words are so relatable and the last two lines “Give us one more Chance to make Old Love Brand New just melts my heart.
Richard, thanks so much for sharing your special words and Beautiful Romantic Heart with us. Can you tell that I loved this one?
Take care & I pray that you are well & having a wonderful Holiday. Warm hugs & Blessings dear Master Poet. Mj😇

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Thank you ever-so warmly, Mary Jo 🍂
Yes, it's true that so many will, probably, relate to .. read more



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Lost rivers from my many tears …
then, flowed to sorrow's seas,

Love the metaphor here, from sea's to tears...aww both in water form.
Sorrow seas, to be quite lonely to drift on...
Awesome writing

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

6 Months Ago

Warmed thanks, Kay-T 🍒

This time you've selected one of my favorite poems, highlig.. read more
Hello Richard, You have such a easy way of blending image and rhyme, as always a lovely poem

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cherrie Palmer

8 Months Ago

We are doing well, we live in a rural area so that helps, and Im still working, which I'm gratef.. read more
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Richard 🍃

8 Months Ago

Be carrreful and keep mindful … we couldn't do without you, Cherrie*
Nice job, Richard. Each line seamlessly flows into the next and the emotion is what gives the poem impact.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

8 Months Ago

Hey Tim!

Ya lookin' good, buddy … LOL!
I really enjoyed your take and commen.. read more
What a beautiful poem, so poignant; lost love, ever desiring to bring her back to the " on old days" of song and dance. But know sometimes those that we have lost will never return. "Lost rivers from many tears" . I could go on, but, suffice it to say, I really love your work!


Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

8 Months Ago

Thank you ever-so warmly, Betty,

I love how you let me know, by your keen interpretat.. read more
Betty Hermelee

8 Months Ago

Thank you for writing such a poignant poem; I will critique some others, a pleasure!!!
Richard 🍃

8 Months Ago

"B L U S H !"
Such a thought-provoking rush. 😌
Such a delightful poem Richard. How beautifully you reason with an old and lost love to return. The penultimate verse is my most favorite. Amazing rhyming and meter! I was tapping my toes as I read it! I can't critique this poem in any way as I have no expertise to do so. But I so very much enjoyed reading it. Keep creating such beauty.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Love your cat on the books! : )

"know that stars cannot take back
what's twink.. read more
DIVYA

1 Year Ago

You’re most welcome Richard. It was a pleasure and I’ll surely seek your guidance soon.
Richard, you know how much I know about making poetry: think one word is 'zilch', the other - the softer Italian, 'niente.'

However, what i do know is true beauty throughout a poem: each of its stanza laid perfectly; every comma, every apostrophe added with proud knowledge.

And then, sir, there's the emotions garlanded throughout! Ok,forgive my wanton behaviour but i have to say WOW! The love, the absence, the please and pleas. the need and fervour seem so utterly sincere. If not, Richard, you 're not only a fine poet but a fine actor, too.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Em,

There is one thing I am certain of: You are as genuinely You and true to yourself.. read more
emmajoy

1 Year Ago

I meant every word, Richard. Thank YOU.
Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

This, Em, I know is true. ✨
Well I don’t know what I’m talking about...that’s for sure, however, I can tell you what my heart, eye, mind and soul desire and it is pieces like this that make them soar and a bit more than envious.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Thank you, My Very Fine Friend!

I'm truly honored to receive such an encouragingly gr.. read more
Richard,

This poem is poetic bliss, perfectly metered, with each word perfectly placed. From beginning to end, it reverberates with my soul. Love it!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Linda Marie,

I thank you from my heart for your warm and graciously expressed appreci.. read more
A very persuasive poem that ripples on a River of anticipation where lovers have gathered fallen Stars to wish upon. Wishes were made to come true... when the Moon is full of promise. truly, Pat

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Hi, Pat! : )
What a sweet review you've gifted this nostalgically romantic little poem.
.. read more
“YES”, This poem is just as beautiful & special as the first time I read it. Love it Richard. hugs and Blessings. Mj 😇

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Mary Jo,
For a second read and beautiful repeat review.

What a trea.. read more

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Added on July 4, 2019
Last Updated on November 25, 2019
Tags: Loneliness, Romance, Tenderness, Hope, Promise

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