Old Love (second thoughts)

Old Love (second thoughts)

A Poem by Richard🖌
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Ballad in alternating iambic tetrameter/trimeter (8/6/8/6 counts) and abcb, defe, ghih, etc; rhyme scheme.

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It’s well I know of lonely nights …

these ever longer days.

Each time my lover's strayed-away

and I'm the one who stays.


Lost rivers from my many tears …

then, flowed to sorrow's seas,

with plaintive, soft-sent sighs to thee,

beseeching on bare knees.


Too well I know that painful grip

of steady, lonesome days,

and dread the fall of eventide,

devoid of your dear ways.


Comes ever to my waiting hope,

unanswered, echoed calls …

there's no relent to this dire need;

too sad, each tear that falls.


Shhh! Listen, hear this heart of mine

sing sweet our love's refrain …

oh, do your feet begin to dance,

or does it bring you pain,


to know that stars cannot take back

what's twinkled in our eyes …

nor, moon forget that which he's seen

on high from warm night skies?


If you shall answer with a, "Yes,

my soul is lonely, too!"

Why not then give us one more chance,

to make old love brand new.



Richard W. Jenkins

©2019

© 2021 Richard🖌


Author's Note

Richard🖌
Painting: Oil on board, courtesy of Pinterest.

Please, feel free to leave hard critique, but know what you're talking about. 🤔

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to know that stars cannot take back
what's twinkled in our eyes …
nor, moon forget that which he's seen
on high from warm night skies?

Maybe but it sure can dim the light in someone's eyes, sometimes be blinded by that light as well.
Love takes two, when one decides not to love anymore it dulls that shine for one half of that party.
This is a since heart warming write though.....

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

2 Months Ago

Oh-yes, Dear Kay 🥀

I so deeply understand your sentiments and completely agree, as.. read more



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I'm sorry I cannot offer a hard critique or any for that matter for I am noone to judge. I can only hope to share my thoughts with you on your lovely poem. I know your pain, I've been there before. How it hurts 😞 and the way you express your thoughts... Wonderful poem my friend.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Months Ago

Thank you, Dear S-1, ever-so warmly and gratefully 🥀

To write for one who so vivid.. read more
The sorrow of a lover drifting away into a different direction away from “us” is tearful.

Trying to rekindle an old love isn’t easy but sometimes oh sometimes it turns out to be amazing

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Months Ago

Thank you, Lady PB 😌

it is so very nice to be read by one who relates and understa.. read more
Poetic Beauty

8 Months Ago

You are most welcome
long long lonely
days and nights
such a longing
to recapture
a romance that
had been and hope
to regain once again~

Shhh! Listen, hear this heart of mine
sing sweet our love's refrain …

speaks a wanton call of love
so beautifully penned
and deeply expressed

nice work


Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Months Ago

How wonderfully beautiful, Fran 🎶

Your words sing a graciously sweet song of poeti.. read more
Interesting storyline progression --> from moaning narrator sounding painfully forlorned & then moving in the direction of accepting the loss & embracing that which can never be lost about what's been lost. Nicely lyrical writing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Months Ago

G'Day, Margie 🌤️

Thanks for reading, complimenting, and commenting on this roman.. read more
I love this poem. Well said and felt. The heartbreaking and so willing to do it all over again. These are the words of a romantic, masterful poet. Thank you for sharing this. I found it to be a heart-warming experience.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Months Ago

Howdy, Jane

A lovely, sunny Texas mornin' to ya … and, how much more wonderful you.. read more
texasjane

8 Months Ago

You are so very welcome. You deserve every word. You are truly talented.
This is certainly a dear poem with many relatable
Words. The moment I finally gave up on lovers lost I found a greater inner peace. Old loves lost was so important to me, but even then I failed at making them a new. So now in my senior years I chose peace for myself rather then hoping to fix my past lost loves.
Great poem but I hope you find peace and happiness with yourself.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Months Ago

Thank you ever-so graciously, Dear Bonnie 😌

Such a lovely thing you've said about .. read more
Lost rivers from my many tears …
then, flowed to sorrow's seas,

Love the metaphor here, from sea's to tears...aww both in water form.
Sorrow seas, to be quite lonely to drift on...
Awesome writing


Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Months Ago

Such beautiful softness your voice imparts, Dear Lady-Poet 🥀

A most revealing exce.. read more
who would criticize such a perfect write, you write so well. I really like and enjoy rhyming poems.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Months Ago

Thank you, Kari 🥂

It is truly a delight to please one of my lovely lady readers in.. read more
A lovely, lonely technically stellar lyrical write. I’m not qualified to give a hard critique anyway, but this has that vintage vibe to it which I find so appealing. It is romantic and gentle and it’s poetic soul is right here Shhh! Listen, hear this heart of mine
sing sweet our love's refrain …
oh, do your feet begin to dance,
or does it bring you pain,

to know that stars cannot take back
what's twinkled in our eyes …
nor, moon forget that which he's seen
on high from warm night skies?

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Months Ago

I thank you, Tammy, ever-so warmly, gratefully, and sincerely 🌾

From the lines you.. read more

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Added on July 4, 2019
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Tags: Loneliness, Romance, Tenderness, Hope, Promise

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