Blessed from above ⁓ (sensual dream)

Fives 'n Eights (see rules below)

   Blessed from above ~
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   'Twas on that Spring night ~
    two hearts soared in-flight …
    on soft wings, sprouted then 'n there;
    such bliss they both knew
    so rarely by few,
    two warm souls were reborn, I swear.

    Her angel face glowed,
    sweet love was bestowed,
    two hearts wed as one evermore.
    Her heart was as pure,
    as his heart was sure
    what fate breathed life into him for.

    Their yearnings entwined
    while stars came aligned,
    a course charted two hearts would take.
    Desires blended one
    as warm as the sun,
    each knowing they'd never forsake.

    There was nothing spared,
    their ecstasy flared
    a spark to ignite coldest blood.
    Ne'er before had came
    such wild, fiery flame
    to bloom full her pulsing rosebud.

    Each heart, soul, and mind
    with fervor combined,
    frames mated in climax-arched rush.
    Warm, pearl rivers flowed ~
    lovemaking bestowed
    with passion that made the gods blush.

    With moon shining bright
    some soft Springtime night,
    I'll soar high with You once again;
    to Bolero, dance
    in your sultry trance,
    tasting your lips' endless champagne.

    The mockingbird's trill,
    dove's soft cooing thrill,
    in ways only lovers can hear.
    This much is assured,
    no lovelier's heard
    by woman's or man's mortal ear;

    yet, time moves along,
    oft waning life's song
    that sang in sweet voices of love.
    Sure, we'll cry sad tears,
    but smile with sweet cheers ...
    for when we were blessed from above ~

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           Richard W. Jenkins
               © 9 Apr 2016



   Fives 'n Eights (or) Doubledown Style 3   
    Original form created by
    Richard W. Jenkins
    © 4 May 1987

    Any number of 6-line verses about anything:
    Aligned left or centered.

    Syllable counts per verse:
    5/5/8/5/5/8 in iambic meter.

    Rhyme scheme:
    xxxxa
    xxxxa
    xxxxxxxb
    xxxxc
    xxxxc
    xxxxxxxb

    xxxxd
    xxxxd
    xxxxxxxe
    xxxxf
    xxxxf
    xxxxxxxe

    Etc…

Author's Note

I would love you to try this form (it is an easy, enjoyable form to learn and make flow), and if you do, please, let me know, so I can read and review it for you.
Thank you so very much for reading this sweet sensual dream poem … here’s hoping you’ve enjoyed it!

Painting: Oil on canvas, from Wikimedia Commons.

Constructive critique is always welcomed! : )

Reviews

[JayceeC]

Oh I like this new form, and I might be able to reproduce it since it has no particular meter, we will see what I come up with.
Great imagery all through this and I'm not sure I can pick out one line or stanza that I particularly like more than others. Passion to make the gods blush, and tangos from Bolero, added to doves coo (I'm thinking mourning doves) adds up to a successful poem with an intriguing new form to play with.
never disappointed when I visit, you my friend.

[Richard🖌]

Beautiful review for this little number, Jan … thanks a million!
That you like my form is especially gratifying and pleasing to a hopeful bard's ernest efforts.
With your brilliant skills composing in one of my forms, it excites me more than just a little … please, let me know if and when you do.
You do know how to make me violently blush, and HOW!
Thank you so much, Jan, for praising and appreciating me … it means far more than mere words.
Hugs! ⁓ Richard

[GreenShoes]

That was fantastic!! Bravo! And the form is great! One minor thing, I wouldn't have used the word entwined twice, but this poem was brilliant! :)))

[GreenShoes]

Oh, there's a slight typo in the title.

[Richard🖌]

Thanks, lovely poetess!
I am so pleased you came to share this piece with me, Karen, and ever-so grateful for your help in setting the wee glitches in my work straight.
You're, also, a true gem to praise my humble efforts so inspiringly … hugs to you! ⁓ Richard : )

[Sammi]

Oh oh oh Richard these are the hottest and most beautiful sex lines I ever read and they have me pulsing and blushing too

Ne'er before had came
such wild, fiery flame
to bloom full her pulsing rosebud.

Each heart, soul, and mind
with fervor entwined,
frames mated in climax-arched rush.
Warm, pearl rivers flowed ~
lovemaking bestowed
with passion that made the gods blush.

and they leave me wondering what you'd whisper in a girl's ear while making love, a dreamy thought to have mm I need to lay down for a spell -- thank you! ;)

HUGGS!
Sammi

Why don't you drop by for a read. ;)

[Richard🖌]

Goodness, Sammi,
Why don't you tell me how you really feel … LOL!
True, it is a bit hot in spots, but I didn't think you'd mind, and obviously you didn't. ; )
As to what I'd whisper, you'll have to use your fertile imagination, which appears to be firing on all cylinders, oh-MY!
"I need to lay down for a spell" … ha-hahhh. it really hit you hard, eh?
Think I might drops your place for a read … I appreciate the invite.

Thank you ever-so "warmly" for a review that rivals the poem … big hugs! ⁓ Richard ; )

[Muse]

This is gorgeous. Your layout...produces a very fluid read. And to take something so intimate and to paint it so beautifully. Well that in itself takes a rare kind of talent. Thank you for taking me here. I saved it, I might like to try your rhyme scheme, which could be tricky. My muse has been silent for years. You'll might have noticed that all my work on the café is quite old.

[Richard🖌]

To receive such high praise and expressed enjoyment from a writer of your caliber is, indeed, wonderfully pleasurable gratification, Dear Poetess, and to know you thought enough about it to save it is beyond my most hopeful expectations.
If you should undertake to compose in my original form, that would bless me ever-so sweetly … please, let me know if you do; I'd love to read and review it for you, and if you might need a helping hand, just tap me on the shoulder and we'll hammer it out together.
I did notice the age of your posts, but we know good poetry is ageless, eh?

Thank you, too, for gracing me, Beth … you're a sparkling star! 🌟 ⁓ Richard : )

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"There was nothing spared,
their ecstasy flared
a spark to ignite coldest blood.
Ne'er before had came
such wild, fiery flame
to bloom full her pulsing rosebud."

I loved this stanza the most! Enjoyed the whole imagery as well as the photo which fits really well with this piece.
"Two hearts wed into one" is a very romantic line for sure..
Great piece, Richard :)

[Richard🖌]

How beautifully gifted your words, Lady Yumna … thank you sincerely.
What a lovely lines you've chosen to highlight … I, too, favor their touch quite well.

Your thoughtful praise and enjoyment both gratify and inspire my humble efforts … happy hugs, Dear Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard : )

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Richard! Always a pleasure reading your works 😊

[horizon]

Ohhh...! These words are so soft and gentle ..."two hearts Wed as one"...this is what lovers do...they just forget themselves and just become one.... unaware of the foundations the world has made...only one person in their eyes and one thought in their mind...wow I just love it,it is so beautiful

[Richard🖌]

My-MY, Dear Ghanishtha!
You're spoiling me ever-so sweetly with the loveliness of your expressed enjoyment, appreciation, and praise of my romantic poetic renderings.
How gratifying it is to know I've connected so meaningfully and deeply with another through my poetry … warm thank you hugs! ⁓ Richard : )

["Fanatical Dreamer"]

Love the tone and descriptions, beautifully written. Poetic indeed!

[Richard🖌]

Gosh!
I am so sorry I missed your sweetly positive review to this warming little number, Dear Poetess.
I cannot thank you enough for this happy smile on my face and in my heart … hugs 'n happy blessings! ⁓ Richard : )

["Fanatical Dreamer"]

You're most welcome my dear

[Einstein Noodle]

just had to pause on that 5th verse ..imagining the gods blushing ..and the closing verse is sublime and one (at 67) i can relate to .. memories of fiery bites from Aphrodite,s apple ... ahhhhhh when we were young! but i will not count meself down ... no no no! the depths and subtleties of love aged are savory and fine indeed! ;) great read ..enjoyed much .. and i like the form ..it seems it is not quite as confining as others ...
E.
ps the painting is a good fit :)

[Richard🖌]

Diolch yn fawr iawn, fy mrawd Celtaidd : )

It's such words in review as yours, E, that makes writing and sharing one's years in developing their expressive, imaginative writing skills, and art-form feel all the more worthwhile, and for the treasured gifts of your expressed enjoyment and praise, I most humbly and gratefully bow.

Yes, E, this form is designed to create its own sense of ease and flow … why not give it a go? It is fun and just the right amount of challenge to inspire even the most accomplished amongst us.

Bless you and your day, My Friend, for your fine, inspiring review! ⁓ Richard

[Einstein Noodle]

maybe it is just the form i need for the poem i told you i was working on .. i have copied and will paste it so i have it handy .. thanks so much!

[Richard🖌]

How excited the thought, E, and how honored I would be.
if/when you have yours posted, whether in this form or another, please, let me know … you're so very welcome, Fy Chyfaill! :)

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ................

[William Liston]

Hello Richard,
Before I write a rhyming poem, I usually decide on the structure of the stanzas first. I'm working on a poem right now, and I just realized that it fits this form. What a coincidence. It really wasn't in my intention to use this form. I structured the lines in each stanza as follows:

iamb, anapest
iamb, anapest
iambic tetrameter
iamb, anapest
iamb, anapest
iambic tetrameter

When I got to third stanza, I thought 'this fits one of Richard's forms,' so I just thought I'd tell you.

But enough about me...as for this poem, I really enjoyed it. It was very romantic and filled my heart with warmth. A very well-written poem to say the least. Great job.

-William Liston

[William Liston]

By the way, the rhyme scheme also fits this form. I just noticed that I only mentioned syllable count in my review.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you again, William,
I am most happy to have another of your always interesting, gratifying, encouraging, and interesting reviews.
It is very rewarding to know the emotional nuances of this piece touched your artist's romantic heart so warmly and fully … this let's me know my intent is successful, and what greater inspiration and gratuity for a bard's labors than that, eh?
I am excited to hear about your new poem, William, and very pleased that it follows the structure of one of my original forms.
It does seem yours fits the scheme of my form quite well, except for the iambic tetrameter; whereas, my L3 and 6 turn trochee after the first couple of words, and iambics is not one of my requirements, but thinking on it, I wonder why I did not make it so?
Well, will be able to enjoy my shortfall while reading your version … I can barely wait. Please, let me know when it's posted.
Is yours a form that originates with you, or did you come across it somewhere? You mentioned the structures of yours fits my "Fives 'n Eights" form; does this include the counts and rhyme-scheme?

What exciting news, William … I know yours will virtually dance and sing upon the page!
Thanks, again, My Friend, for such a great review to this romantic little warmer, and for sharing more of your poetic progress! ⁓ Richard

[Richard🖌]

Ha-hah!
Of course, you told me your syllable counts by iambic, anapest and Iambic tetrameter … duhhh!
never grow olde, William … it just ain't hardly worth it … LOL!
While I was asking, you were telling … great minds and all that! : )

[William Liston]

Yes. My poem fits both the count requirement and the rhyme scheme. The form does originate within me, but there were some other factors/influences at play.

I originally wanted to challenge myself by trying out different rhythms, so I just thought of different patterns of stressed and unstressed that sounded good to me. For inspiration, I scanned certain lines in Nessely's poem "Sweet Little Words" (I'm not sure if that's the poem's name, but it's close). Though it has no specific meter, it flows very well, and I hoped to use some of her rhythmic patterns. I then thought of a review written by JayG in which her said "the first two lines consist of an iamb followed by an anapest..." His review came to my mind almost at random.

I went throgh many ideas until I finally settled on the aforementioned one. Here are some other structures I pondered:

Anapestic dimeter
Anapestic dimeter
Iambic tetrameter
Anapestic dimeter
Anapestic dimeter
Iambic tetrameter

Iamb, anapest
Iamb, anapest
Iambic trimeter catalectic
Iamb, anapest
Iamb anapest
Iambic trimeter catalectic

Iamb, anapest
Iamb, anapest,
Iambic tetrameter catalectic
Iamb, anapest
Iamb, anapest
Iambic trimeter catalectic

There were some more, but those were the ones I pondered the most. Maybe I'll use them in another poem.

[William Liston]

I meant to say 'hypercatalectic' instead of 'catalectic.' Not quite sure what I was thinking at the time...LOL.

[Richard🖌]

That is remarkably coincidental, William.
Still, I am quite sure i am not the only one in the entire galaxy of poets who has ever thought of my Fives 'n Eights form (albeit in a different name, or if named at all), but as far as i "know", no one before me (in 1987) had composed in my exact form; therefore, I believe it is original. Many since have composed in it worldwide, however, considering I've served on over two dozen international poetry sites since 2003, and many have been taught, exposed to, and tried this form.
Again, I am excited to see what you do with yours! ⁓ RJ

[Richard🖌]

Including several on Writer's Café who've composed in it … LOL!
The poetry world can be smaller than one might think.

[Richard🖌]

Hey, William!
Check out all these forms … it will blow your mind:
http://popularpoetryforms.blogspot.com/p/known-poetry-forms.html

[William Liston]

I'll definitely check those forms out. Thanks for telling me about the site.

[William Liston]

Mind-blowing indeed.

[Ana Papaya]

Very beautiful poetry Richard. Soft, romantic and full of enduring love.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you so very warmly, Dear Poetess! : )
Your enjoyment becomes my own, your praise, my gratuity, your presence my ultimate delight!

Bless you with many happy hugs! ⁓ Richard

[Marianne Rose]

Lovely, old-fashioned, sweet and romantic- wasn't aware of the structure until you wrote it out, so thank you. Not sure I'm accomplished enough to try it, but will let you know if I do. Thank you!

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Marianne! : )
I took a little stroll through a few of your pieces and came away with a healthy regard for your considerable skills.
I have no doubt you could compose a splendid poem in this form of mine … if you''e the mind to; I hope you do and will.

Thank you ever-so warmly for your lovely review and very nice compliment … gracious hugs! ⁓ Richard