Oceans Between Us

The Earth tears at my ankles,

In this pitch dark of the night,

Wind howling in my ears, Satanic force,

Ripping my heart with all it's might,

"The ship just won't sail tonight" 

They call down from below,

For the air had turned the tide against us-

And there's no way for me to go

This rocky cliff that gains me height,

Once stood for me like a throne,

Now it gives me clear view of the vast ocean,

Of the storm I now call my own,

I could never live life without you,

I reach but can never hold on to your presence,

I want to embrace you in my arms,

But it seems the ocean separates us,

The waves can crash upon this ship,

but God forbid, don't sink it

Its sad that there's the seas between us,

Full of tears I cry at night for you,

Wishing I could look you in the eye,

And say how much I love you,

 

Author's Note

Hmm. Love poetry. Yet another thing thats not really in my range...

Reviews

[Onlyme]

Great write Sarah, the turmoils of love, The ebbs and flows of feeling passion and closeness. When the distance is in between you both.

[LazerRays]

Thank you dawn so much!!!! That means a lot :3

[Perdition]

The irony of love huh? You give everything and in return pain follows with intermittent periods of passion...what be the problem?..hahaha. You are not out range here and in fact again I actually felt something which does not happen often so keep it going...know your best but push at those margins until the muse begs for mercy. Way ahead of your range "typical teen". And very impressive. You chosen Columbia yet or Harvard?.;P You could do it. Commute would be rough ..but ya want it or not..I think you're doing wonderfully on your own and this is just another masterpiece.

[LazerRays]

Hahaha you flatter me. My head might explode soon. Thank you so much! This is actually a poem about a long distance relationship haha. Which unfortunately I am experencing now... It's that want to be with them in real life. But alas, there's an ocean between us lmao. I'm not really those types of college person. I suck at math. And anything scientific except for astronomy and quantum mechanics. I'm more of a language, arts, creative, cultural lover haha. But that definitly raised my ego haha. Thank you soooooooo much again!!!

[Perdition]

So Juilliard it is then...You would be and are brilliant so don't sell yourself short on anything. Course there is an ocean between..hmmm :) My pleasure Sarah~

[LazerRays]

Hahaha thanks again perdition. Your conplimnts never stop XD

[Deep]

Beginning of the poem makes us curious, and the second stanza sets everything. Third one is all beautiful and fourth one provides the clue which journey are we going- "But it seems the ocean separates us"- And there is no word about fifth and sixth stanza, they have the power to take any reader back and remind them their past. That's a lovely poem in whole.

[LazerRays]

Thank you so much!!!! That review means a lot :) I'm glad you get it :D

[Ana Papaya]

sarah, this is beautiful
it's a bit different from your usual and showcases your range and talent
nice job

[LazerRays]

Thank you so much! It's diefinitely different hahahaha

[The Iron Horseman]

A very well expressed vignette of the yearning for a lost love. Knowing your penchant for the dark side, I thought you were channeling Bram Stoker in the first few verses, so I was surprised when it turned into such an emotional poem. Well done, Sarah. It made a nice change of pace.

[LazerRays]

Oh thank you! Yeah, Im not used to this category. I mean, my older works have love poetry but I've mainly evolved into dark poetry. I did try to accomplish no making it a dark poem... Buuut... I can't help it.

[The Iron Horseman]

Lol! Hey, you have to be you - and your dark stuff is fun too.

[angel]

You did well, for someone who says poems aren't in your range.
Truthfully, this is a better poem , in my considered opinion, than many I have read here. Don't sell yourself short, dear heart. You did just fine!

[LazerRays]

Yes, love poetry isn't really my thing. But what you feel.... And that's how I ended up writing this. I'm glad you liked. Thank you so much!

[Gee]

Ah, the soft and yearning side of Sarah, nice. My long distance love affair was only 400miles, England and Scotland, but love has had us together now since October 1991. No barrier is to big if the love is strong enough.
Enjoyed reading your softer side

[LazerRays]

thank you so much... mines not that close unfortunately.... but im glad you enjoyed :)

[Chris Shaw]

Different type of poetry for you. It's good to experiment Sarah and you have written a lovely poem here. Some fine imagery. Your Oceans Between Us is a tad melanncholic, but in a nice way.. All good wishes

Chris

[LazerRays]

thank you.... i wasnt sure about this genre...

[Chris Shaw]

You did well, keep expanding your outlook :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful dear Poet.
"The waves can crash upon this ship,
but God forbid, don't sink it,
I'll keep looking across the seas,
so gems won't fall apart to trinkets,"
Love yearning, if we are lucky. When we find. Perfect place to know. Thank you Sarah for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[LazerRays]

thank you so much! thats so nice of you! this review made me smile :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I am glad Sarah and you are welcome my friend.

[kitty]

A brilliant portrayal of me during life's journey. The ones we love are divided by 'oceans' that often keep us apart be they family or imaginary lovers. Thank you for bringing this to the fore.

[LazerRays]

thank you so much! that means a lot :D

[kitty]

You are so welcome!