Observer of the moon

Observer of the moon

A Poem by Michelle N. H.



 in the night i watch him

as he wanders across

the dark space above


the twinkling of stars

keep my eyes wide awake

as nature moves in

his breath of cool


making sweet music

for my soul to listen to

and taste before

the morning sun

dawns anew


 by his loving hands

in her locks of shine

that may cross a

thousand terrains

i am yet to stroll


© 2014 Michelle N. H.



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Michelle N. H.

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Your words have such an interesting style! I enjoy the pairing with the music as well! You appeal to the senses!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Michelle N. H.

3 Months Ago

Thank you, Nicholas.
I find this odd but perhaps artistic and perhaps intentional on the part of the author or writer. From merely looking it seems the piece needs some editing. There's no capital letter, periods, nor punctuation. But don't be fooled ...just simply looked beyond the obvious ...the introspection ...the vocabulary...the rhythmic flows of words, how short the sentence yet condense with meaning. How the thoughts and themes, feelings and emotions of such longing are perfectly interwoven in such a short stunning lines. Here perhaps the author is thinking outside the box. Perhaps is trying something out of the norm. It seems it intentionally violates the rules of grammar. Yet by looking beyond skin deep . All the lines and words and stanza are all in complete harmony with one another.

Isn't space and galaxies and universe which are beyond our naked eyes reach are like that. The space doesn't have a beginning nor an end. No signs, no boundaries and no self impose limitations. Perhaps the author or persona is a Stargazer... Splendid write !

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

NeiL ArandA

2 Years Ago

It's my pleasure Michelle. I thought I have offended you when you close your account. It's good to s.. read more
Michelle N. H.

2 Years Ago

Not at all, Neil. You did not offend me with any of your words. On the contrary, they made me feel g.. read more
NeiL ArandA

2 Years Ago

:) .......................................................................................... You .. read more
Beautiful imagery and wording. I find it enchanting...:)......................

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very nice writen . words can touch human soul. thank you.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully written. Your words are serene and passionate. I love the image.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Michelle N. H.

2 Years Ago

I appreciate that. =)
There isn't anything negative I can say about this. I love the image, the song I kind of like, the font is great, the spacing, and of course, the poem itself. The first and last stanzas are my favorite. The way you write about the moon it seems you are talking about someone you love

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Michelle N. H.

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Kuandio. =) Your words are appreciated by me, and yes, the one I love is within the lines.. read more

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Added on September 30, 2014
Last Updated on September 30, 2014
Tags: circles, moon, sun, night, day, stars, luminosity, illumination, space, love, not mine

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Michelle N. H.
Michelle N. H.

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I'm Michelle. To strangers I may seem reluctant, but I'm really quite open towards those that are patient and genuinely interested in getting to know me. I think a lot. I'm hardly ever bored. I've.. more..

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