You did

You did

A Poem by Shasha

You fired the fireplace​ inside,
Which no one did,
You warmed my heart,
Which no one did,
But soon, you spread it's​ smoke all around,
Which no one did,
You darkened my soul,
Which again no one did.

© 2017 Shasha



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Amazing use of words. You said everything needed in the short poem. Love make us feel so damn alive and can make us know great sadness. Thank you Shasha for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Months Ago


Shasha

4 Months Ago

I am pleased that you liked it, friend!
Coyote Poetry

4 Months Ago

I did enjoy this one and all your work.
Shasha

4 Months Ago

Thank you!!! A great compliment!
the fireplace metaphor is splendid
love the layers of the story

Posted 5 Months Ago


Shasha

5 Months Ago

thank you Elario, it means a lot to me!
I fired the ire of fires place at my side as I paced and paced beside the fire-side... Haha... I seriously loved your wordplay here, and was inspired... Darkened souls of no ones dim-witted dread, oh wait... This was a marvelous, smoky write...

Posted 8 Months Ago


Shasha

8 Months Ago

This review is... a bit different! I loved this it!!! Because it's funny! Oh, yes, thank you very mu.. read more
Silente

8 Months Ago

Haha, well I DO try to be a bit off-the-wall with my reviews... Nothing worse than the tedium of cop.. read more
Shasha

8 Months Ago

That's really nice, different actually!
:-)
To be loved means we can perhaps be hurt as much...sad...beautifully written Shasha...

Posted 8 Months Ago


Shasha

8 Months Ago

Love gives us weekness, thank you Poppy!!! I am pleased that you liked it!
a sad testament to love and loss...

Posted 9 Months Ago


Shasha

9 Months Ago

Yes actually! Thank you Chris for your review!!!
wonderfully written....this a poem i could relate to..thanks for sharing.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Shasha

9 Months Ago

Oh, thank you, Wajiha! I am glad that you liked it!
Wajiha Nayeem

9 Months Ago

my pleasure dear...
I really like the general idea behind the poem. The language is fine. The metaphors are rather good. I would have preferred it if you had not added an "again" in the last line. That kind of makes the language clumsy, you see. But this is overall a great work.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Shasha

9 Months Ago

I put "again" to show the end. Thank you very much for the review!
You’re not weak for slipping into familiar patterns, you’re human. But ultimately, your happiness is in your hands. You deserve a love that exists on one entity of happiness, not on both misery and ecstasy. And you should never settle for less than you deserve. Great poetic interpretation of the dualities in a bitter sweet relationship!

Posted 9 Months Ago


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Shasha

9 Months Ago

Yes, that's true! Thank you very much! I am pleased that you liked it!!!
it's too good...I liked it...:)

Posted 9 Months Ago


Shasha

9 Months Ago

Oh, thank you Surya! It means a lot!!!
Surya

9 Months Ago

My pleasure..!!

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