Lost Over A Leaping Flame.

Her name, is like a flame leaping up onto me, into me around me, surrounding me.

 Although she causes me grief, this is my belief, She could have me,

 would she have me is what I must ask,

 I can put away the mask, she see's the true me, the real me. But can she understand how I feel?

 how she makes me feel? Sometimes I wish I could; would tell her how I feel,  and somehow make her deal...

 I should; I could, no, never, ever could 

I  would I, even If I should. I never ever could.

Author's Note

Don't worry about the grammar- Enjoy

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice thinking words in this with the feelings, nice ending. I love this description:
"Her name, is like a flame leaping up onto me, into me around me, surrounding me."

[Poetic Beauty]

There are some contradiction thoughts in the piece. I like you are thing out loud. Creative with questions only one person can answer.

[Legacy]

James,

Honestly, you have encased so many thought processes in a single poem, showering the strength of each individual sentence, into one harmonizing write.

To me that is a million voices dancing around in your skull knocking against your cranium... pleading with you to let them out, only some are allowed to escape.

Nice...

I was sucked into this poem to to the point I was blinded to see any grammerical errors...

Enjoy'd Entirely.

Must go review your others,

Legacy

[ErinLovesYou<3]

It's a challenge to find someone who actually understands you for who you are. Personally I don't think it's possible until you understand who you are. Great job James

[Butterfly Ninja :3]

really nice i don't know if it's just me or maybe it would look aesthetically pleasing if it was in colums ish (?) ignore my great english right there