Three seconds

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        In the beginning, when I was young, I had control over it, I was the master and it was at my command.  I was certain of it.  Now as time has gone by, I have fallen victim to its seductive lure more often than I care to admit.  It has become clear my control was an illusion and I am now at its whim.  I've tried to fight it, to control it, to hide how badly I need it and I confess...  I fear time is running out.  Everyone will know,  I am a time traveler. 

I can jump into the future at will.  Sometimes it's only a few minutes, sometimes it's as much as three hours but I assure you, I have the ability, the power to do so any time I wish.

It is a lonely responsibility to move through time but I am one of the lucky ones, I have a companion... Auggie.  To all outward appearances he is merely an over grown cat but believe me when I say he is in full belief he is a dog.

When he is not patrolling the fence line, he is faithfully at my side waiting for the opportunity of our next jump.  As you might expect the method is quite complex and the electronic equipment involved is beyond the understanding of an ordinary mind.  The choice of the right frequency is paramount to an early departure and ultimately the success of the jump.  Once chosen, usually a cooking ­channel, I take my place... reclining to allow Auggie access to my chest... it's the most comfortable position for him to stand guard over me and then, in what seems like a mere 3 seconds to me I am transported to the future.

"Nice nap?" my wife asks and I smile wryly comfortable in the knowledge I have successfully jumped once more and she is none the wiser... I am a time traveler and I have come from the past to help.

 

 

Reviews

[Sesame]

Hello Tegon,

Thanks for entering the competition. Alas not a winner this time. I do not have the time to provide a detailed critique on all the submissions, but a few remarks:

- the 'control' is never lost is it? By starting this way you make it seem that control will be lost, but it isn't.
- first sentence you keep repeating control, using other words (master, command) but it adds nothing new
- the role of Auggie is not exactly clear
- in my opinion the end is a bit of a cliché

But it was a nice read all in all. Keep it up!

Regards,

Sesame

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[Zahra]

thank you for your submission. Here it goes: https://www.facebook.com/HalfStepBeyond/photos/rpp.115167729298914/140908193391534/?type=3&theater

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

Many fail to comprehend the difficulty of using fewer words to convey a bigger picture, or to consider the effect this has on the reader. Like fractal geometry, one may scrutinize details or step back to explore vast implications. Your work is highly admirable.

[Sky Writer]

Hi :) I can't wait for more of this..

[Kimberly Miller]

This was really good, I enjoyed how at the first part, you keep everything very mysterious.

[Jessica]

Very interesting and clever. Keeps readers thinking the whole way through...

[lissalovesyou]

Wonderful twist at the end...
lissalovesyou:)

[Tsukin Archangel]

This was really neat! Nice twist ending really ambigious

[Mia]

I’m still trying to decide if he’s really a time traveler or just someone with an overactive imagination. Wonderful (wishful) dreaming or reality? If I were Auggie…I’d want to be a dog too! Great write, had me from start to finish!