What others see, what I see, what you see

What matters is how we see life

You see my mother

I know a warrior

She never gives up

Always so strong

 

You see my father

I know a hero

He fights with honor

Wish I could mirror

 

You see my brother

I know a soldier

Searching for the truth

Hates how injustices rule

 

You see my grandmother

I know a queen

With kindness she reigns

And loves all the children

 

You see my grandfather

I know a king

Who protects his family

From any danger

 

You see a girl

I know I am a writer

What others see

Doesn't matter

 

As long as you believe

You will have magic

Author's Note

I hope you like it. What do you think?

Reviews

[Ashley Lytle]

I really love this. It is something I think others can connect with and I love this idea you are looking at with this poem. The idea where you talk about how others view people and then how you view people. This poem really made me think about that in my own life.

[Tomoe Tellez]

I'm glad it did! :D Thank you for your kind words.

[Sultrysoul]

And you have magic. This flows like a beautiful song. I love it.

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thanks for the compliment. :) And for reading it.

[Sultrysoul]

It's my pleasure... keep sharing :)

[Nightfeather]

You are right. How one looks at life can influence one's mind and soul. You have an interesting and bright way of describing the way you life your life. I have the same view as you on my family and that made me really connect with this beautiful and bright poem.

Good job :D

[Tomoe Tellez]

That's good to know, not everyone has the luck of having a loving family. Most of my family members have inspired me to make many of the characters in my novel. Thanks for reading and for your words! :)

[Nightfeather]

You're right and good luck with your novel :)

[Kaliope]

"You see a girl - I know I'm a writer" - loved that line. And tell you what, I see a writer too when I look at your work! :-)

[Tomoe Tellez]

Wow! Thank you! When I wrote that line I was afraid it would sound arrogant.

[Kaliope]

I know what you mean, I just recently learned to call myself a writer without a feeling that I was presumptuous. But in the end it's not about being published or famous or rich or perfect... it's just about that inner need to tell the stories that rumble about in our minds. At least that's how i choose to see it :-)

[Tomoe Tellez]

I know! :D When my family asks me nowadays if I want to be a writer, I tell them that I was born a writer, it's like my species. Ja, ja, ja. It would be a dream come true if I could live off what I'd make with my writing, without the need of another job so I could write all the time. Right now I'm a computer technician, but my parents keep telling me "we believe in you, but you need a plan B." And you're right, I don't want to be famous, I just want my stories to be read.

[Rachel McLean]

I love the message you're sending towards readers, and if some people have trouble seeing the message in any type of writing (aka me) then the title sort of provides a hint, at least it does with me. Even so, the message is so clearly shown without declaring it to the world. I also enjoyed each description of all of the family members. Whether they be make believe or your true family, I could easily picture them. Great piece, and I honestly couldn't see anything wrong.

[Tomoe Tellez]

Oh my gosh! Thank you so much for your lovely words! :) I wasn't sure of the title until I saw your review. Thanks!

[Rachel McLean]

No problem! I only just realized it now, but if you could somehow shorten it just a little bit, I think it might be a bit better. i.e. 'What others see and what I see," or something along those lines. Of course I'm sorta tired right now so my thought process may not be the best (wow I'm totally just selling my ideas XD) so you can just ignore this if you want.

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

Read it. What was the first stanza you wrote? The idea started from where? I'm curious!

[Tomoe Tellez]

Well, I wrote the first one first, ja :D, the idea was in my head for a while because ever since I was little this is how I've seen my family. Thanks a lot or reading!

[Mitali Shah]

Lovely piece dear. It describes the love, care and affection inside you towards your family. God bless :)

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thanks a lot for your words, you're always so nice.

[Mitali Shah]

Your welcome dear and thanks for the compliment. God bless :)

[J. Espedal]

I like it. It conveys one of life's simple truths, that others do not know our loved ones like we do. I especially love the final lines.

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thank you for reviewing and for your lovely words!

[Amy R]

wow, excellent work!
i loved this, has real meaning.
good job!

[Abyssmouse]

I said it before - I really like your use of denotative and connotative meaning.
You have a knack for creating clarity in this manner.
I love the last two lines.

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thank you very much for your words, I'm glad you liked it. :)

[AaronFreitas]

Awesome write... I love the creativity and the format that you chose for this one.
"You see a girl
I know I am a writer
What others see
Doesn't matter"
I love that stanza :)

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thank you :)!