Hairpin

The air I chocked on tasted of bitter salt

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The air I choked on tasted of sour salt,

Black droplets blemished flawless ivory

I kneeled, having found nothing of use

 

A lone finger swabbed across,

Quivering as I turned my hand to see

The smudge faintly lit

By a skeptical new moon,

 

Tears selfishly made a sound

As they crawled along my throat

And as they blurred the rich crimson

I might need a rag.

 

A twinge of pain, sometimes, would not whine,

Until you've noticed the sliced flesh

A swift stab with the slightest hairpin

Lingers longer.

 

Author's Note

My chest hurt when I wrote this. Literally. I thought it was phycisally fractured because it hurt so persistently.

*Image title: Piano
*by *Kindoffreak
*Link: http://browse.deviantart.com/?qh=§ion=&q=piano#/d1i6y2s

Reviews

[M.Kilani]

painful image you have there, touch of despair and hopelessness, I like the numbness you describe before feeling pain, sounds like emotional pain created a state of disorientation that made physical one only visual.
keep it up, and cheer up.
well done

[carmz]

pain ...pain is such a big enemy as well as teacher to every one of us.

this poem awakens the pain in me...

[Nautili]

"Black droplets blemished flawless ivory" had double meaning to me- the piano, an extension of your pain, the music embodying it, and your pricked finger on the hairpin, the black droplet of blood on white skin. The picture was perfect!!! really good!!!!!! The prick of the hairpin symbolized to me a quick, jabbing pain, like the sudden realizaation of a betrayal. And the hairpin speaks of being a woman and all that denotes.....

[M.Babu]

I think the pain you were feeling was amplified so effortlessly into the words. I felt like a big weight was on my chest as i read this...and i think the vividness and depth of the words really really did this piece justice.

And the image also really prepared me for what was to come. Nicely done :D

~M.Babu~

[Dante Balsote]

Not all knowledge is desirable. So often, it starts to hurt when you start to notice.

[Coyote Poetry]

Artwork and poetry was amazing. I felt pain when reading the words. The poem in so few words told of a journey with pain. Thank you for a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Emily B]

purest poetry

[George Love]

This almost sounds liek a depression oriented pain, grabbing you deep inside and making you feel pain without cause. Thsi is a very well done work, so keep it up. Much improvement since your first works!