Draining

Draining, slowly draining

from each pore

flows what this should have been

filling buckets with pain

silent ripples in galvanized containers

spilling, quickly spilling

staining sidewalks

on dead end streets

where children play

and people laugh out loud

calling, endless calling

to empty skies

with blank stares

and dark clouds

evaporating the future that is now

draining, slowly draining

 

 

 

Reviews

[D. Mansfield]

I see why you have such a large following, after reading this. Beautifully written poem

[willweb]

Wow, thanks so much. You found one of my older pieces. Glad you liked it.

[William Michael Reeves]

Finally I get an explanation as to why the future is always just out of reach. It evaporates! And I didn't think I'd learn anything today. Thank you.

[willweb]

Wow, you climbed way down in the sewers of my work. I hope you brought a flashlight. : ) Thanks so much William, I don't even remember half of these.

[willweb]

wow... so descriptive and visual and made me want to run over and help and put my arms around...

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Nisa for your nice comments to day. I am thrilled you found this one.

me too.. you are a wonderful writer and one I shall visit often.. your words stir my own emotions.. and my need to write also... thank you for embracing my heart and spirit

[Rose Black]

Loved the poem... slow flowing like thick darkness taking over the world you see but eveyone else ignores..

Love R

[willweb]

Thank you so very much. I am happy you enjoyed this one.

[Kai Rollins]

I thoroughly enjoyed, and this piece did quite well in displaying the dark. I really enjoyed.

[willweb]

Thank you Kai so very much for your nice comments. I am happy you liked this.

[Kasey Miriam]

Beautiful melancholy and flow. Wonderfully written

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Kasey for you nice comments today. I am pleased you njoyed my poem.

[Kasey Miriam]

You are very welcome! I'll be sure to read more when I get the chance.

[Alani]

Reminds me of another song: "Inner city blues" - by Rodriguez
If you are not familiar... it's a great song to look up!
I would love to use some of your poems in lyrics to sing!

[willweb]

I will check that out as well. My friend, please feel free to use any of my poems in or as lyrics for your songs. I don't mind at all. I would love to hear what you do with them.

[Ashley Griffiths]

Great flow throughout the piece. I love the meaning and use of metaphor.

[willweb]

Thank you Ashley for your comments. I am glad you liked this one.

[Blue]

Very well done, Will. I like how you inspire the readers to read between the lines. More impressive is your unassuming style. Keep it up.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Arzel Joy for saying nice things about my poem.

[Leslie Philibert]

Fine job, like the alliteration, and the central extended metaphor..

[willweb]

Thank you very much for your comments Leslie. I am pleased you enjoyed this.