Shudders in echoes

 

 

“I'd never known her to cry”

 

Her smile that warms

each heart that it touches

Springtime and daisies,

blue morning skies

 

“but this time is different for sure”

 

As rivers stop flowing

neath cloud altered whispers

set off in motions

of sorrow filled cries

 

“she's shaking with tears in her eyes”

 

knees meeting soil

her face now she’s hiding

shudders in echoes

of pain she does know

 

“as she picks up what’s left of the night”

 

in moon beam intentions

now star lit and lonely

I hold her in comfort

so my love does show

Author's Note

Inspired by sadness, love and comforting fears as well as the Black Rebel Motorcycle Club's song "The Toll" Italicized words = BRMC lyrics.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad story in the poem. I liked how you told the story in the poem.
"in moon beam intentions
now star lit and lonely
I hold her in comfort
so my love does show"
A very good ending to the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[willweb]

Thank you so much for always being so kind to me.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoy your word and you are welcome.

[Ruth]

You have such a unique deliverance...every line lures and immerses...wow xo

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Touching write
of tears fallen
and caring about another in sorrow,
and the surroundings reflecting
in the poem.

[willweb]

Thanks again, I appreciate your kindness

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome!

[Hímayun kuræshýe]

the lyrics of the song and then the words of your own .....a great intense read for me !

[willweb]

Thanks so very much my friend. I am thrilled you liked this one.

[MsJewel]

I am drawn in by the softness of your words...sad and yet so beautifully written.

:) Julie

[willweb]

Thank you Julie for your kindness.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Beautiful poem, Will, as ever. Very well done. :) Rudi

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Rudi.

[katja]

from the title to your closing line, this is truly inspired, emotive & simply beautiful...
... i adore the lyrics quoted throughout, they truly augment the feelings you've skillfully evoked in this piece

thank you for sharing
~yekaterina

[willweb]

Thank you so very much miss m for your kindness.

[MomzillaNC]

Your poetic voice never fails to touch the soul. This one is a write of such sorrow and tenderness…

[willweb]

Thank you so very much for always being so kind to me.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. I'm only ever honest.

[Matching Socks]

This touched my heart.
It's a beautiful song and your own verses capture the sadness, frustration and loss beautifully.
I'll wipe that tear now.

[willweb]

I'm happy this one touched you Ana, a very wonderful friend was down the day I wrote this. I was trying to take her pain from her and release it via words. Thank you so much for always being so nice to me.

[Matching Socks]

You're a good friend Will. I think it helped for sure, knowing that you care. :)

[blue angel]

"As rivers stop flowing
neath cloud altered whispers." I just adore that line and the lyric inserts compliment it perfectly. It's beautiful and very emotive. Falling to her knees with her face in her hands is a striking image along with the shuddering echo's. Thank you for sharing this poem! Respectfully, blue angel

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Blue Angel for your kind words today.

[blue angel]

you are very welcome! ;)