Waking

On wet grass,

I wake from a slumber sleep.

May be death

or dream so deep.

Up above hang clouds,

mysterious,

shimmering,

in the dawn colour sky.

There is life upon the fluffy white,

where the rays of light touch,

oh so high.

Reviews

[Gary H]

This captures a nice picture but do watch the tenses you use. The second line should be 'I wake..' and I would lose the 'ed' at the end of 'colour' although I understand the reason for writing this. You may also consider that if you use punctuation make sure all the lines read properly. The first line does not need a full stop at the end. 'Or' should be 'or', after white should be a comma as the line flows into 'Where' (to become 'where')
Please read this positively. I have just studied on a Creative Writing class and found the above to be my faults too. Just passing on what I have learnt to help you. Good luck. It's hard work!

[Blossom]

really nicely composed, love the flow and imagery of this. almost as if you're waiting for something to take you away

[Bubo]

Beautiful..........waking to see another world above you......