~ My Mourning Hat

~ My Mourning Hat

 

 

 

It so happens often when I think

I was there on the day of luck

A immense feeling you’re almost there

The perfect experience heading through

All on a journeys due

 

Walking in the footsteps of the futures you?

But entwined in the arms of the darkest roads

Not realizing or having any clue

Yet I do like to believe the good in all

And I wished even I could recall

The days of joy and proper luck

 

But thoughts, of me are wrapped up

Behind a smoky mourning hat

To observe the world by modesty

And a fuzzy well covered vision

Of reality’s realm, which is still 

The only place that keeps me silently calm

 

It so happens when I dwell

In thoughts of another ones moment ,

Not specially wanted

But sent for an unsure reason

Wakening in a space of not your roots

Living by moments of eating their foods

Until you take every precious moment

Within your acceptance and not be scared

For a rich mind vision and are prepared

 

It so happens, I seek the truth

In between all written and spoken

But as I’m a product of your soul

And you a product of mine maybe

We both read with a lot of speculations

As we mourn the more we read

Deep and deeper in our honesty

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"Of reality’s realm, which is still
The only place that keeps me silently calm"
A powerful poem my writer friend. I had to read again. You gave me many thoughts to ponder. Hard to know what is right or wrong. Sometime we accept what is given. A very good ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

Thank you dear and brilliant fellow writer, I will be back for your art, and beautiful poems... I will.... x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"journey's due"
"future's you"
"another one's moment"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like all the speculations along this journey..

a thinking kind of poem...

check through this...there are several possessives but they need the apostrophes...

and yes, we do mourn the more we read.

jacob

Ah thanks a lot Jacob, if I made any English mistakes, please help or mail me what I could improve ok, I'm just on the road right now, but I will fix it as soon as I can... :) thankies

[Pax]

very expressive write my friend... emotion filled sadness in the pages of the mind of the narrator ;)
oh...i just love this lines:
We both read with a lot of speculations
As we mourn the more we read
Deep and deeper in our honesty
~ deeply profound thought, something that hides in speculations of our honesty..
Brilliant!!!

Thank you Willy x

[Sugar Plum ♥]

very special, personal deep thoughts, feeling of observation, little coldness, and truth appear in each verse...I admire how deep is your world, imagination and honest reply to your own questions...amazing, dear eli! i liked this specially:

It so happens, I seek the truth
In between all written and spoken
But as I’m a product of your soul
And you a product of mine maybe

[Sugar Plum ♥]

oh, also i simply love your title! seems so expressive like a movie!

Thank you sweetheart for always seeing a little more than others :) you're such a wise soul thank you xxx hugs

[sharonlee]

Profound thoughts E.L... many layered and gracefully searching.

xx

Thank you very much darling xx

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is thought provoking... (especially the last stanza) seems to peel away the layers to find the truth. There is a calm tone within the sadness, an acceptance of the "mourning," perhaps. I truly connect with this piece.... Captivating write Sis!

Thank you beautiful woman xx

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I loved reading it! :)

Makes me happy, and inspires me to write more xx thanks a lot

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Keep writing Sis!...it makes me happy too. :)
good night... I'm off to bed. :)

[Tree]

Mysterious, enchanting words. I liked the tone, the vibe that came off the words as I said them. And the way you ended it, the last stanza... it was affecting. especially the last two verses...

Gracias amigo, :) Puedo saberme y sentirme como en casa muy fácilmente en nuevos lugares... thanks a lot, your words are always valued here!

[gombeggar]

'Wakening in a space of not your roots' ....such a delightful line...i am jealous..this entire work is a nice journey and it sounds well when spoken too

Oooh thank you :) I spoke it while I wrote it, with my charming uuuh accent.... lol wow, you got it :D

[Revery]

Love the mystery wrapped in this write. Thread of understanding pulse from it. I relate to a lot of what I think you are saying. Nice dear. Love it.

Thank you so much, dear one, I so value your thoughts. I'm glad you are one of a few who has the ability to understand me profoundly :)

[Revery]

Your welcome, thank you for your friendship.

:) always...