Psychotic interloper

she just snuck up on me.

I didn't hear her
come up behind me
I didn't feel her
vile overtures
invading my cells

and tickling parts
of me
in a rather
intimate
way.

The psychotic interloper
entered in the
middle of the night.
leaving me
some nasty presents

a cymbal crashing
in my head,
an endless drip
from the tip
of my nose

and an all over body ache
that lingers
right down
to the tip of
my fingers.

she could have
given me
a warning
or left a box
of tissues, at least.

Author's Note

Reviews

[MrsBear]

I agree with this poem. For some reason, fall seems like such an emotional season for me. Great describing details and describing of emotions.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it is that season...time to get that extra box of tissues...

i like the way you portrayed this...nice personification.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for your review, I always appreciate both your work and your visits.:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Tis the season for the common cold as our bodies adjust to the weather… A very amusing take on the little bugger that can make a big impact.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks, I was in a mood, a stuffy mood.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Awe well maybe I should send some chicken soup your way.

[therisa]

Never thought, the cold/flu bug, as being female, rather more male, for me. Unlucky me, they never stay a simple cold/flu, but migrate to my chest and interact with my asthma. Taking a more physical toll upon my health, and leave me, holding the bill. I hope you get well soon, KL.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yeah well I male bash entirely too often. Thanks for stopping in.

[therisa]

Hate to say, but some men deserve to bash, to knock some sense, into the rock collection, which they call, their brain. Just letting out some stream, at those, who have hurt me, in the past.

[Bright Ocean Star]

It is funny you personified such a nasty thing as a cold to be female. Pesky, annoying, irritating, invasion of space, and requires you to spend money at the local drug store...makes sense to me! Nice writing and imagination on this one...:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Well I think of a virus as complex and sneaky and under handed. I guess that's why I picked a female. Unless it's bacteria.

[Bright Ocean Star]

lol.................:)

[ANM]

Nothing worse apart from man flu...... Enjoyed this little twist on not feeling so good. Don't forget the lemsip!!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. It's Buckley's grapefruit and vitamin water for me.

[ANM]

Sounds good !

[Pryde Foltz]

Blasted colds … yes … they are the epitome of the single white virus … achoo and good bless you, KL.

[Lyn Anderson]

I love that thanks

[Rene Salinas]

This is the season yes indeed, and them bones with the cold,you just wait until you get to my level of physical inadequacy. I could compose a sonata with all the different noises my body makes so when I virus attacks oh my , I am already starting to feel something coming. And lets be frank about this a Man's cold is the worse thing on the planet. I would even go as far as putting on par if not slightly more challenging than pregancy. I need a man fly jab pronto.

Go away viruses

Thankyou

[Lyn Anderson]

No creature on earth is more pitiful than a man with a cold. I still did 10 k today.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha what a fine way to describe a head cold. The psychotic bit drew me in given my background and I am still churning over in my mind the features of psychosis and its significance to a virus lol

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. It was actually based on a conversation with a friend. We both hate those ones that sneak up on you, and both have had dealings with people with psychotic tendencies.