Trouble

My own rendering of ex girlfriend Robyn Cooper and I. She the mother of the little boy Drake, to whom I dedicated my second book.

Robyn and I

Tarry not down life's long road

stay quick fleet and true

Weary's the path on which you tread

be mindful of that you do

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Seek the heart as long you search

wrap it tight in Love's embrace

be mindful to it's needs and wants

keep it clothed in silk and lace

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Never assume once struck by love

she would not wish you to replace

But learn you hard as she is scarred

the feel of loss from her embrace

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Take you this from the lips of a sinner

heal the calluses, wounds and sores

The smart man learns from his mistakes

while the wise man learns from yours

 

Tate

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Reviews

[Magdelena]

Hey!!! Know what? You one wise man me friend.. I have met many out there, yet you.... Ahhhhh The wisest there is. For you write with soul. Deep inside of you lives a old soul from way back and with it came a gift that will last a lifetime.. And you know how to use it my friend.. That is your gift for all.. Your gift to us.. And we thank you kindly..

Grace'

Mags xx

[sharonlee]

That last stanza is so potent... rounds this with a smile.

[ALIEAH ROSE...]

THIS IS TRUE...
THE LAST STANZA...
MORE THAN ANYTHING...
ANOTHER GREAT WRITE...

[joshua deathdealer]

"But learn you hard as she is scarred the feel of loss from her embrace"..such an emotional poem and the wording is so refreshing. Excellent, excellent work.

[Abdul Aziz]

Beautiful, Tate. I wish I could say more. I could write on the technical aspects of the poem, but then it would be devoid of any meaning. Emotion is the driving force behind this poem, and you're as good as any I know in conveying it. The clarity and honesty of your words is something I hope to emulate. Thank you for sharing this poem!

[Mrs. Laura Aranda]

thank you for submitting this in my contest. I really liked the drawing you added ...the first stanza was my favorite...but the last lines are the ones that stayed with me:

The smart man learns from his mistakes

while the wise man learns from yours

[Jade Leilani]

How unfortunate that hindsight is always 20/20. You've skillfully woven words that bring a warning to those in present sight to treasure what is and wisdom to all to learn not just from their own failings but those of others. Profoundly simple truth : "The smart man learns from his mistakes while the wise man learns from yours"
Thank you for that.

[Seriana]

This is a wonderful piece. It made me sad a little, yet filled with hope at the end. I loved the way you wove your words together. They fit neatly and rhyme nicely. And your rendering adds just the right physical touch to the verbal. Nicely done!

[LadyNaida]

This is so true. And sometimes when we realize it might be too late.

[msharma]

A wise man's draft .Very skillful