Mannequin

Cinquain poem for contest

Mannequin

Lifeless Model

Showcasing time’s fad

Lonely, meaningless displayed canvas

Hollow

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[I Am Svetlana]

These things scare me sometimes, but they always seem so flawless whenever I see them. I was in a mall one time and an actual person was posing as a mannequin, then she moved as I got two feet in front of her and I freaked out. Now, I know to keep my distance. Haha.

[Briana O'Connor]

lmao. thank you for sharing this story. It has brought a smile to my day! they are kind of creepy. I'm not sure where this inspiration came from, but when I discovered the format of this type of poem a manequin instantly popped in my head. I've seen shows about how in different countries they do have live ones. Interesting idea, but very freaky indeed!

[I Am Svetlana]

It was indeed a very freaky experience. My mom was with me when it happened and she laughed at me, which then made me laugh at myself in return. But they are beautiful in their own way.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

I'd never heard of a Cinquain poem. I just like this little verse.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Amanda Worthington]

I liked how it was so meaningful in so few words and how you chose an item that isn't common. The explanation in your note also helped to clear up confusion :)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for reading :D

[BClancy]

I liked it. Despite the fact that it was very short, it was powerful and had well chosen vocabulary. Thanks for sharing :)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[beautiful dreamer]

is this a poem prompt? i need to start to do these again. i like that you chose this object. i always found mannequins alittle weird. hallow does desribe it well. thanks for the authors note to aviod confusion. i like the poem, also like that you use pictures to relay your poems :)

[Briana O'Connor]

yes I found it on a competition. I also use various writers blogs to inspire my writing when I'm out of ideas. thank you for reading :D

[Dayran]

A view of the body ... that goes past any fixated sense of humanity ... but sees it simply as the bone ... nerves ... and tissue. Reminds me of the robots ... they make these days ... that can walk ... play a musical instrument ... and distribute flyers at malls. A new perspective ... that over hauls ... anything older. Nice ...

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[Luna Zerimar]

I loved, loved, loved!

Thanks for the explanation. It made it a bit more clear. :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[RAOrourke]

Good job in capturing all that was needed to create the poem and to have it come away with meaning!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much

[TL Boehm]

and so in life - seems like this applies to people as well. Well done.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[stars are far]

That was well written the style you used 1-2-3-4 words.. great, and yeah the mannequin, its supposed to be a plastic to show cloths, but poeple now aday think that its beauty this body is beauty.. yeah you worte that well ,,great work :)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D