Was it a dream?

A dream/nightmare I had the other night.... decided to write about it.

I reach for help, no one is there

I try to breathe, gasping for air

Suffocate me, can’t take my soul

Desecrate me, a spirits toll

Try to escape, but I just fall

To my scarred knees, I plod and crawl

Still cannot breathe, frantic for air

Can’t pull away, Lord hear my prayer

Hands cover mouth, death seems so near

Open my eyes, grab rest my fears

For I am awake, twas just a dream

Demons can’t take, my soul from me

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Cherub]

Loved this. My favourite lines were "Hands cover mouth, death seems so near
Open my eyes, grab rest my fears
For I am awake, twas just a dream"
Personally, i think this imagery was fantastic. You really made me and almost feel what was happening. Very fluid with movement and keeps a nice pace. :^) Thanks for the great read, Aaron!

[AaronFreitas]

haha no lie when I read your favorite lines I was like did I write that or did she add that lol... it's been a while since I've read this and it was nice to go back to the mind set I was in. It's been forever since I've written so thanks for your review my friend :)

[Fallen Phoenix]

A type of dream I am all to familiar with. In future when trying to describe it I shall use this piece as my reference. Im a sucker for some good rhyme and rythmn and this has both in abundance. Real captured the panic excellently! I applaud you!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much my friend!!! It wasn't easy finding all the right words to make it what I wanted but I think I got as close as I can to describing how it feels during those nightmares. Thank you!

[Moonie]

Must have been one scary dream. That is why we are taught to check under our beds for hidden nightmares before going to sleep. Lol. I used to even say a special little prayer to keep nightmares at bay. My dreams are always quite vivid too..
I really like this narration, it's power packed and reminiscent of The Rime of the Ancient Mariner in a way.
Demons cannot take a pure soul--what a wonderful message you've chosen to impart, Aaron!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much my friend.... it was one of many scary dreams. Seems I've been having quite a few of these lately and it just felt good to write about it :)

[Ana B.]

hmm....some dream my friend :) often had one of those .....a shaking experience....
well written Aaron :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Ana :) They are not the funnest dreams to wake up to.... thats when it's good to have a cuddle buddy and mine is still a pillow lol

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The battle between good and evil filters through, even in dreams. However, a soul bathed in faith cannot be taken, as much as those demons can torture our minds. And, isn't it just like God, to wait until the last minute to jump in and save us? Epic battle, my friend, and epic poem. Well-done!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much FT.... I like what you said with a soul bathed in faith cannot be taken... so very true my friend. Thank you for the comments :)

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You are welcome, Aaron. Happy Easter my friend.... it is a good day :)

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Oh Wow.. What a piece.. I have had these dreams and sometimes, they are incapacitating..
They say it's your conscious going into overdrive..

You described it quite well, my friend!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Ashley :) I have been having these more and more lately then they tend to go away for a while. Hopefully they leave soon.

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

I'm sure they will. It could be stress related with the new house move and all...

[AaronFreitas]

Could be.... I lay in the spot my great uncle dI'd when he died.... it kind of creeps me out

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

That's a bit fucked up.. lol

[AaronFreitas]

A little lol

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Lol. It is... just be glad you don't have what I have... That's a messed up thing

[Deepika]

A spine-chilling nightmare. Spooky! Very well written Aaron(y)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Deepika!!! I appreciate your comments my friend :)

[Pash]

i love the last part..."my soul for me". Great piece!

[Pash]

i love the last part..."my soul for me". Great piece!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much my friend :)

[Death's Poet]

This is beautiful and sad. I really enjoyed this

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Shadow Poet... I am glad you enjoyed this my friend :)

[ANTO]

This is one dream Im glad I didnt get. Its a sheet soaker. God knows how you were probably flailing about like a madman in the bed acting this one out - it sounds like a PTSD type of nightmare Aaron. Truly one that you won't forget in a hurry.
So well... actually ..too well described but thank God you woke in time - d'ya ever hear that supersitition about actually dying if you die in a dream - or is that Freddy Kruger Im thinking of.
Good write mate !
:)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much for the review my friend :) I've always had weird dreams like this.... maybe should not have caffeine after 5 haha

[ANTO]

Vivid colour dreams are a sign of intelligence Aaron. Caffiene after five kind of cancels that out lol
Happy Easter my friend.

[AaronFreitas]

Happy Easter my brother.... hope you have a good one!

[ANTO]

And you and your lovely girls Aaron - enjoy !!