Pinata

a stuffed poem of angst

piñata

how I wish you were

a statue of david

piñata that I could

strike over and over

with a baseball bat

 

i’d watch you sway

back and forth

and all around

with your pink guts

of bubble-gum

pieces hanging out

 

what a productive

way to spend

my day

beating the crap

out of you

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

whoa! get it out, put that rage on the page.

[Ruth]

Owwww! Now that is a punch felt and heard! Great piece love...good to get it out at times xx

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

OUCH!
Hidden underneath this innocent title is a VERY ANGRY message.
Good job!

[sugar]

hahahahah!!! oh wow i wish i could beat a sertain person till guts hung out....well penned and i loved it....i just dont get why its rated mature

[Christina May Shanaberg]

I don't understand the adult warning. This is so funny! You have expressed something that we all feel, in such a visual and humorous way. I have a couple of Pinatas in mind, right now!!

[KINGFAN]

omg omg omg omg omg i looooooooove you!!!! exactly how i feel about my ex!! i love it and you expressed your feelings in such a perfect analogy that it made me smile and want to build a pinata that looked like my ex JUST so i could beat it to death lmao

[Shep]

Date much? Just don't swing that bat this way. Look out her she comes...

[Larry Dyson]

ouch...very angry very expressive..good vent!

[Jibey]

Great way of letting rip!

[Becky C Strukamp]

Oh my goodness, excellent write of a bit of hostility and wanting to rid oneself of those recurring thoughts, been there, done that, and it does help.

Excellent write.