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Deep in it

Deep in it

A Poem by Jada Johnson
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are you deeply inlove?

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his locked eyes, begin to drown my insides and he’s only known me for quite some time  


i told him he’s in for a surprise, as i sip on this wine and fantasize 


i want you to be mine, in the middle of the night is when she’s most alive 


lets lay down and pretend my bedroom ceiling is the dark blue sky 


she hates when it’s time to say goodbye, and it’s known that you take me higher than any drug 


it’s a saturday night and she’s love sick, when we kiss it reminds me of noni jean in that chick flick


you are the one i pick, and when we’re apart it still feels like we’re in sync 


i know you don’t like when i over-drink, and we both equally hate it when i overthink 


but i promise you i’ll be there no matter how hard things get, and i’m happy that we decided to take a shot at this 


they tell me you’ll never know the exact moment when your life changes, but i knew the moment we started flipping through these pages


its crazy i’m the one you considered dating, some nights i wish life was more carefree, and i was somewhere extremely faded


and at times when i’m feeling jaded, i won’t hesitate to search for some stimulation 


i know i’ll always be your favourite, one who's always kept you captivated 


and you forever leave my heart racing, you’re charm and witt, far from calling it quits, because I’m so deep in it 




 














 



© 2017 Jada Johnson



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"you are the one i pick, and when we’re apart it still feels like we’re in sync

i know you don’t like when i over-drink, and we both equally hate it when i overthink "


I like the conversational approach you took with this poem. Its really relaxed and in the pocket


Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jada Johnson

2 Weeks Ago

im glad you liked those specific lines, this is probably one of my favourite poems i've wrote in awh.. read more
Malcolmveli

2 Weeks Ago

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Beautiful. It had a really good flow.
The poem made me feel like I was reading lyrics for a song. That's a good thing in my opinion. It means it had a nice rhythm to it.

Posted 1 Day Ago


A poem that brief's the jaded romanticism of one's love to another in few words of wine. Nice imagery here... beautifully well structured, & re-phrased with acoustic rhyme. Would be looking forward to reading your poetry soon.

Posted 1 Week Ago


This has a distinctive musical quality to it..I can almost imagine Taylor Swift singing it... I would advise that you should fair it out with capitalization and correct pronunciation, as they would make it more visually appealing. Other than that, it sounds fantastic! Good writing!

Posted 1 Week Ago



"you are the one i pick, and when we’re apart it still feels like we’re in sync

i know you don’t like when i over-drink, and we both equally hate it when i overthink "


I like the conversational approach you took with this poem. Its really relaxed and in the pocket


Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jada Johnson

2 Weeks Ago

im glad you liked those specific lines, this is probably one of my favourite poems i've wrote in awh.. read more
Malcolmveli

2 Weeks Ago

You're Welcome
I can tell you are a very skilled writer in the art of love. Love really does make you sick, as you mentioned, in a good way I suppose. It's nice to read poetry like this, to know someone has the same feelings. Really nice write Jada, loved it!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jada Johnson

2 Weeks Ago

your kind words are very appreciated, and I'm glad you got to relate to this as well!
Kinda funny thought: this had a SZA, Syd from the Internet kind of vibe to it; like, I could hear an R&B backdrop going with this flawlessly.

I dig it!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Jada Johnson

2 Weeks Ago

its crazy because i love listening to sza a& syd, both so amazing..

thank you for th.. read more
I really enjoyed this one. I felt the intensity behind the writing, or maybe the intensity came from what the writing made me remember.....

great work

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jada Johnson

2 Weeks Ago

thank you & I'm glad you were able to relate to it!
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Sky
Absolutely deep and passionately penned. If the love the true then definitely you would be deep in it.

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Jada Johnson

2 Weeks Ago

i totally agree & thank you
Sky

2 Weeks Ago

Your most welcome.
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JC
Makes me nostalgic for those early times in a relationship that just makes you feel so great. enjoyed the read. Good to see fellow Canadians here too.

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Jada Johnson

2 Weeks Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed this, and yes i noticed i haven't really came across a lot of Canadian writers
*Welcome to "Pure Rhymes" Thanks for joining, great to have you...!*

I must say... A lilting rhyme scheme, and well-breathed lines... Relatable word choice... The first half, especially, very tight with the syllabic slant... The switch into a "longer" flow on each "bar" for the end is a superb technique, imo, for wrap-ups... It all makes for a smartly put-together verse... The chick flicks get us in sync to be even more carefree and jaded, I think... Solid write...

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Jada Johnson

2 Weeks Ago

wow.. thanks for putting so much thought into this

i appreciate this and I'm glad yo.. read more
Silente

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for the time taken to write it...! You are most welcome

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